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<span class="postbody">Some people believe that they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. v.2

<span class="postbody">Some people believe that they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. v. 2
Whether people should pay tax to the government or not is an argument of great debate. Some people think that it is government's responsibility to raise money from other sectors and should not take the portion of a person's hard earning cash while others stand just opposite of this opinion. I believe if the government spend the money for the benefit of the citizen, as it meant to be for every country, and value  the mass people's opinions and suggestions how to best use the money, then there is nothing wrong with the tax paying method and rather had many positive reasons to do so. Those who are against the tax paying system often opine that the government should never take their hard earning money for the sake of country's development scheme. This is especially true for those who earn an amount that barely supports  his/her family and who are not satisfied with the public service provided by the government. In many countries, people have to pay a tax of more than a quarter of the total earning of a year and yet do not get basic facilities like treatment, education and they have to spend their own pocket money for those purposes. This is very natural that they become angry about the tax paying. But tax, collected from the people of a country can be a great fund to use for their betterment by the government. There are lots of poor people who can be benefited from the tax paid by the others. The government can build more roads, offer public services, and can introduce other useful scheme using the money. Almost in most of the countries, people who earn more than a predefined amount have to pay tax and not for those who earn less than that amount. So Government is not forcing poor people to pay tax but those who are able to pay tax.
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to the
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people
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think
that it is
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government
's responsibility to raise
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money
from
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other
sectors and should not take the portion of a person's
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hard
earning cash while others stand
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opposite of this opinion. I believe if the
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government
spend the
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money
for the benefit of the citizen, as it meant to be for every
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country
, and value
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the mass
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people
's opinions and suggestions how
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to best
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use
the
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money
, then there is nothing
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wrong
with the
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tax
paying method and
rather
had
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many
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reasons to do
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.

Those
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who
are against the
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paying system
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often
opine that the
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government
should never take their
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hard
earning
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money
for the sake of country's development scheme. This is
especially
true for those
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who
earn an amount that
barely
supports
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his/her family and
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who
are not satisfied with the public service provided by the
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government
. In
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many
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countries
,
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people
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have to
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pay
a
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of more than a quarter of the total earning of a year and
yet
do not
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get
basic facilities like treatment,
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education and
they
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have to
spend their
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own
pocket
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money
for those purposes. This is
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natural that they become angry about the
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tax
paying.

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tax
, collected from the
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people
of a
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country
can be a great fund to
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use
for their betterment by the
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government
. There are lots of poor
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people
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who
can
be benefited
from the
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tax
paid by the others. The
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government
can build more roads, offer public services, and can introduce
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other
useful scheme using the
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money
. Almost in most of the
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countries
,
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people
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who
earn more than a predefined amount
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have to
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pay
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tax
and not for those
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who
earn less than that amount.
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So
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Government
is not forcing poor
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people
to
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pay
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tax
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those
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who
are able to
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pay
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.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
48Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay <span class="postbody">Some people believe that they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
318 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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