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<span class="GreenTitle">Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of unisexual schools. v.1

<span class="GreenTitle">Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of unisexual schools. v. 1
Boys school and girls school shoot up very rapidly both in foreign countries and at home. Some prefer to send their kids to a unisexual school and some prefer a co-education institute. Many sociologists and educationalists present their views on this issue from  one side or another. However, I believe that both have positive and negative effects. Some parents prefer to send their children to boys school or girls schools in the hope that their children can concentrate on study and acquire adequate knowledge and skills because unisexual schools can make out appropriate curriculum and courses for students according to their sexual characteristics. Again, many guardians think that their kids might be spoiled by the contact of opposite sex, especially those  who are  religiously conservative, prefer a unisexual institute. In some girl schools, students have a wider choice of courses such as dancing, music, embroidery and drawing, which can cultivate their feminine elegance and charm. Furthermore, students can devote themselves fully to their study and will not be distracted. Campus love affairs are very common in the current society under the influence of media. Boy schools and girl schools can eradicate contact between different sexes and purify the campus environment. Of course, some experts point out that boys school and girls school are not beneficial to the adolescent development of students. They believe that boys or girls are likely to develop their abilities and stimulate their imagination when they are studying with the opposite sexes. Besides, students can cultivate their interpersonal skills. Some other people think that separating boys from girls can cause some psychological problems to youngsters. Meanwhile, this separation affects social progress and lead to sexism. Investigation shows that graduates from unisexual schools are not aware how to get along with their colleagues in their career. To conclude, everything has double folds and unisexual schools are no exception. From my point of view, I think the existence of unisexual schools meets the need of some parents. But it is definitely not a paradise for their children.
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have a wider choice of courses such as dancing, music, embroidery and drawing, which can cultivate their feminine elegance and charm.
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IELTS essay <span class="GreenTitle">Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of unisexual schools. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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