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You should spend about 40 minutes on this IELTS writing task. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of unisexual schools. You should write at least 250 words. You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples v.1

You should spend about 40 minutes on this IELTS writing task. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of unisexual schools. You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples v. 1
Schools are the citadel for teaching children and preparing them for the real world. Some parents have an opinion that sending their children in coed schools offer innumerable advantages, whereas others opine that they have a negative impact on their children. In this essay, we will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of bisexual schools. By enrolling student in unisex schools by their parents they are exposed to diversity at the a very early age, which makes it easier for them to adjust in different environment easily. Children can more easily socialise with the opposite sex which is not possible if they study in single sex school. Thus, improving their communication and interaction skills. Moreover, the teachers in coed schools teaches students the lessen of equality between boys and girls as a result neither of the sex will consider their opposite sex as inferior. To elucidate, according to the recent report of United Nations Education organisation, children studying in coed schools display better results academically and develops an overall strong personality than students from single sex schools. However, there are few demerits associated with the students studying in coed schools. Firstly, students spend most of their time with the opposite sex in schools which leads to distractions and this have a negative impact on their performance. Boys and girls might have an infatuation and liking for each other which can lead to engaging in relationships and eventually into sexual activities, because of which they will not concentrate towards their studies and career. To exemplify, according to the recent study, more than 80 percent of sexual activities happen in coed schools thus affecting the overall lives of students and performing poor in exams. To conclude, in the aforementioned essay I have discussed both the positives of admitting students in mixed sex schools which is enhancing their skills and treating everyone equally as will as the negatives of sending students in unisex school which is distraction towards opposites sex and poor academic results.
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Schools
are the citadel for teaching
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children
and preparing them for the real world.
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Some
parents have an opinion that sending their
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children
in
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coed
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schools
offer innumerable advantages, whereas others opine that they have a
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negative
impact on their
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children
. In this essay, we will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of bisexual schools.

By enrolling
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student
in unisex
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schools
by their parents they
are exposed
to diversity at
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the a
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very
early age, which
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makes
it easier for them to adjust in
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different
environment
easily
.
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Children
can more
easily
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socialise
with the
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opposite
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sex
which is not possible if they study in single
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sex
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school
.
Thus
, improving their communication and interaction
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skills
.
Moreover
, the teachers in
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coed
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schools
teaches
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students
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the lessen
of equality between boys and girls
as a result
neither of the
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sex
will consider their
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opposite
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sex
as inferior. To elucidate, according to the recent report of United Nations Education
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organisation
,
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children
studying in
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coed
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schools
display better results
academically
and develops an
overall
strong personality than
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students
from single
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sex
schools.

However
, there are few demerits associated with the
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students
studying in
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coed
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schools
.
Firstly
,
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students
spend most of their time with the
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opposite
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sex
in
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schools
which leads to distractions and
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this have
a
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negative
impact on their performance. Boys and girls might have an infatuation and liking for each other which can lead to engaging in relationships and
eventually
into sexual activities,
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because
of which they will not concentrate towards their studies and career. To exemplify, according to the recent study, more than 80 percent of sexual activities happen in
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coed
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schools
thus
affecting the
overall
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lives
of
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students
and performing poor in exams.

To conclude
, in the aforementioned essay I have discussed both the positives of admitting
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students
in mixed
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sex
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schools
which is enhancing their
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skills
and treating everyone
equally
Did you mean "as well as"?
as will as
the negatives of sending
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students
in unisex
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school
which is distraction towards
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opposites
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sex
and poor academic results.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay You should spend about 40 minutes on this IELTS writing task. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of unisexual schools. You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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