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Sometimes people think nowadays the media (TV, newspaper, the Internet) are less concerned about the accuracy of news than in the past, and the incorrect information may cause more problem to the public. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Sometimes people think nowadays the media (TV, newspaper, the Internet) are less concerned about the accuracy of news than in the past, and the incorrect information may cause more problem to the public. v. 2
Nowadays, there is a different view of the issue about whether the incorrect information could hurt the public or not. Depending on personal experiences and beliefs, we may find that some people hold that the inaccuracy information will definitely make some bad effect on us, while others have an opposite attitude. As far as I concerned, we disagree with the statement that it may cause more problem to the public. The following discussion will explore my view. Indeed, the information in the media should be as most accuracy as possible. The right information is essential for the media, especially in the program of the news, and telling the public the truth of the fact is the duty for such media. Moreover, if the media delivery the wrong messages to the public, those messages may influence the judgment of people, and then cause them have not fully correct judging on those things, facts, or comments. Thus, in some of the views, it really has some not good effect. On the other hand, does it really cause more problem to the public? Sometimes the media as news must have to report some information which does not have definite answers, or some things only are guessed by the reporters of the news. For example, the decision made by the president of US will make which influence and how the bad effect to the economy of American will be, which have no an absolute answer and only can be guessed for the commentators, and the media cannot without report it just because it still not happens. In fact, the information from the media, no matter TV, newspaper, or the Internet, will have some incorrect in sometimes. However, we cannot say it will cause more trouble just due to the accuracy is going to worse than before, because we all have the ability to figure out whether the information is right or wrong. Even if somebody has no or less such ability to posit the information which can believe or not, we still should not assail to more incorrect news will let us have more problems but should complain the people who have no ability are not going to improve it. In conclusion, despite the fact that the wrong information does have the bad effect, this problem has existed a long time, and there are other factors should consider discreetly when we make the comment that wrong information will cause more problems than before. Therefore, we could not presumptuously believe the statement
Nowadays, there is a
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view of the issue about whether the incorrect
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could hurt the
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public
or not. Depending on personal experiences and beliefs, we may find that
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some
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people
hold that the inaccuracy
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information
will definitely
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make
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some
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bad
effect on us, while others have an opposite attitude. As far as I concerned, we disagree with the statement that it may
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cause
more
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problem
to the
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public
. The following discussion will explore my view.

Indeed
, the
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information
in the
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media
should be as most accuracy as possible. The right
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information
is essential for the
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media
,
especially
in the program of the
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news
, and telling the
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public
the truth of the
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fact
is the duty for such
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media
.
Moreover
, if the
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delivery the
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wrong
messages to the
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public
, those messages may influence the judgment of
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people
, and then
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them have not
fully
correct judging on those things, facts, or comments.
Thus
, in
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some of the
views, it
really
has
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not
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good
effect.

On the other hand
, does it
really
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more
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problem
to the
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public
?
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the
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as
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must
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report
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which does not have
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answers, or
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some
things
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are guessed
by the reporters of the
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news
.
For example
, the decision made by the president of US will
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make
which influence and how the
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bad
effect to the economy of American will be, which have
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no
an absolute answer and
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only
can
be guessed
for the commentators, and the
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cannot without report it
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because
it
still
not happens.

In
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, the
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from the
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, no matter TV, newspaper, or the Internet, will have
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some
incorrect in
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.
However
, we cannot say it will
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more trouble
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due to the accuracy is going to worse than
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before
,
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we all have the ability to figure out whether the
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information
is right or
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. Even if somebody has
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no
or less such ability to posit the
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information
which can believe or not, we
still
should not assail to more incorrect
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news
will
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us have more
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it.

In conclusion
, despite the
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that the
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wrong
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information
does have the
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effect, this
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has existed a long time, and there are other factors should consider
discreetly
when we
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the comment that
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wrong
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will
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cause
more
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problems
than
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before
.
Therefore
, we could not
presumptuously
believe the statement
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IELTS essay Sometimes people think nowadays the media (TV, newspaper, the Internet) are less concerned about the accuracy of news than in the past, and the incorrect information may cause more problem to the public. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
416 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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