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Some people think the media including newspapers, televisions, radio, and internet sources are less concerned about the accuracy of news. They think the information from the media is becoming incorrect. Do you agree with this opinion or not and explain wh v.1

Some people think the media including newspapers, televisions, radio, and internet sources are less concerned about the accuracy of news. They think the information from the media is becoming incorrect. Do you agree with this opinion or not and explain wh v. 1
It is argued that more capital should be invested in safeguarding the species which are close to extinction, while others believe that it is a misuse of worthy money. This essay disagrees that protecting endangered species is a waste of valuable funds as humankind has a big responsibility on its shoulders to protect the wild animals on the verge of facing extinction and the allocation of funds can be wisely planned. The protection of wild animals must be a basic responsibility for humanity. Firstly, every living being on the planet is equally important to maintain ecological balance. This is to say that the ecosystem is well balanced with the existence of all species on earth. If the endangered species are not protected, this could lead to an ecological crisis. For example, if Japan did not halt whale hunting this could result in the extinction of whales and which in return would create a huge impact on ocean life and fish stocks, on which many people depend for a living. Smart expenditure of funds is very crucial when we have a tough economic crisis. The wildlife reserves could be a solution to this phenomenon, where wild animals will have a safe habitat and at the same time, these wildlife reserves or sanctuaries could generate income from visitors. This could also generate jobs, revenue and protect wild animals from poaching. For example, the Gir national park was originated to protect the endangered West Bengal tigers, which were close to facing extinction due to poaching. Now there is an exponential rise in the number of tigers as they are in a protected environment and this National Park has the most numbers of visitors in the country. In conclusion, the red list of endangered species should be the main interest of mankind to maintain an ecological balance on earth and creative solutions should be encouraged to plan the economic resources which protect the wildlife and benefit the governments.
It
is argued
that more capital should
be invested
in safeguarding the species which are close to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
extinction
, while others believe that it is a misuse of worthy money. This essay disagrees that protecting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
endangered
species is a waste of valuable funds as humankind has a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
responsibility on its shoulders to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
protect
the wild
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
on the verge of facing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
extinction
and the allocation of funds can be
wisely
planned.

The protection of wild
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be a basic responsibility for humanity.
Firstly
, every living being on the planet is
equally
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to maintain ecological balance. This is to say that the ecosystem is
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well balanced
with the existence of all species on earth. If the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
endangered
species are not protected, this could lead to an ecological crisis.
For example
, if Japan did not halt whale hunting this could result in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
extinction
of whales and which in return would create a huge impact on ocean life and fish stocks, on which
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
depend for a living.

Smart expenditure of funds is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
crucial when we have a tough economic crisis. The wildlife reserves could be a solution to this phenomenon, where wild
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
will have a safe habitat and at the same time, these wildlife reserves or sanctuaries could generate income from visitors. This could
also
generate jobs, revenue and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
protect
wild
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
from poaching.
For example
, the
Possible spelling mistake found.
Gir
national park
was originated
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
protect
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
endangered
West Bengal tigers, which were close to facing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
extinction
due to poaching.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
there is an exponential rise in the number of tigers as they are in a protected environment and this National Park has the most numbers of visitors in the country.

In conclusion
, the red list of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
endangered
species should be the main interest of mankind to maintain an ecological balance on earth and creative solutions should
be encouraged
to plan the economic resources which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
protect
the wildlife and benefit the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think the media including newspapers, televisions, radio, and internet sources are less concerned about the accuracy of news. They think the information from the media is becoming incorrect. Do you agree with this opinion or not and explain wh v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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