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Sometimes people think nowadays the media (TV, newspaper, the Internet) are less concerned about the accuracy of news than in the past, and the incorrect information may cause more problem to the public. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Sometimes people think nowadays the media (TV, newspaper, the Internet) are less concerned about the accuracy of news than in the past, and the incorrect information may cause more problem to the public. v. 1
Countries with less economy should be supported by the richer countries when they hit by any natural disasters like Tsunami, Earthquake etc. I completely agree, the states with good economy should help the poorer countries not only when there is a natural tragedy, but also when they face some human-made disasters. Initially, If the country faced some natural disaster, it will affect the country's economy when compared to the global GDP. The poor economic countries will have tremendous problems due to the local body can't help the people who are in need as there are lack of funds. The wealthy countries should help the needy countries to support their people and to come out from natural disaster. For example, when Srilanka and the western part of Asia were hit by the dangerous Tsunami which has caused huge loss to life and property in this case many wealthy states took the step to come forward and help them economically. Additionally, the wealthy nations should also help the territory's when there are some man-made disasters like the Coronavirus, which is spreading widely as there are some poor economic states like Africa, even they don't have good equipment to test the virus so the wealthy territories should also help the less economic states in this case. As the wealthier country can help the poorer countries when they suffer any natural tragedy by exporting food and giving the money to recur their current damage to the state. In conclusion, I agree with the above statement that the well off kingdom's should help the less economic countries when they face any environment attack. However, this helps the local governance to rebuild their damage and also helping the people who are in need.
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with less economy should
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countries
when they hit by any
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natural
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disasters
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economy should
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the poorer
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countries
not
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when there is a
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tragedy,
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also
when they face
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some
human-made disasters.

Initially
, If the
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country
faced
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some
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natural
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disaster
, it will affect the country's economy when compared to the global GDP. The poor
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economic
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countries
will have tremendous problems due to the local body can't
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help
the
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people
who are in need as there are lack of funds. The
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wealthy
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countries
should
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help
the needy
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countries
to support their
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people
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natural
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disaster
.
For example
, when
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Srilanka
and the western part of Asia
were hit
by the
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dangerous
Tsunami which has caused huge loss to life and property
in this case
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many
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wealthy
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states
took the step to
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come
forward and
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help
them
economically
.

Additionally
, the
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wealthy
nations should
also
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help
the
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territory's
when there are
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some
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man
-made
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disasters
like the Coronavirus, which is spreading
widely
as there are
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some
poor
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economic
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states
like Africa, even they don't have
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good
equipment to
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test
the virus
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states
in this case
. As the wealthier
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country
can
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help
the poorer
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countries
when they suffer any
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natural
tragedy by exporting food and giving the money to recur their
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current
damage to the state.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
with the above statement that the well off kingdom's should
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help
the less
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economic
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countries
when they face any environment attack.
However
, this
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helps
the local governance to rebuild their damage and
also
helping the
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people
who are in need.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Sometimes people think nowadays the media (TV, newspaper, the Internet) are less concerned about the accuracy of news than in the past, and the incorrect information may cause more problem to the public. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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