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Someone suggests school to cut the Recycling. Do you agree or disagree with this suggestion, explain why. v.2

Someone suggests school to cut the Recycling. with this suggestion, explain why. v. 2
It is believed by a strata of society that the investment made in technological breakthroughs for doing research in space is not satisfactory, as there are other fields where this fund can be spent more wisely to reap more benefits. I opine differently and do not support the conjuncture hold by this group. The space exploration gives significant information about the planet and other objects in the Universe. Further, predictions related to weather are also associated with it. In the given essay, I will explain why it is indispensable to spend on this project. The atmosphere beyond the Earth is different and to search the various possibilities available in the Universe, it is vital to acquaint with it. This can only be possible by exploring it, for example, unlike the Earth, the other planets are made-up of gases, some are extremely cold and some are very hot, but can we gain benefit out of it or not? Therefore, it is expedient that we send shuttles such as the NASA agency has recently sent one shuttle to the Mars planet to understand the expectancy of life there. Undoubtedly, these researches required funding in billions, but to remain silent would be more fatal because we can not only gain the knowledge of resources and opportunities available in outer world, it can also make us aware about the possible threats. For instance, the satellites in the sky keep sending information and alerts to the scientists about the usual as well as unusual activities, which can make them aware in advance of any occurrence of any disaster events, which can be prevented by active approach. Although, it is undeniable that exorbitant amount is spent on such related projects, the benefits in terms of knowing the unknown are prominent. However, in relation to the budget allocation to the other sectors, it is the responsibility of the government that those areas should also get sufficient funds to flourish.
It
is believed
by
a strata
of society that the investment made in technological breakthroughs for doing research in space is not satisfactory, as there are
other
fields where this fund can
be spent
more
wisely
to reap more benefits. I opine
differently
and do not support the conjuncture hold by this group. The space exploration gives significant information about the planet and
other
objects in the Universe.
Further
, predictions related to weather are
also
associated with it. In the
given
essay, I will
explain
why it is indispensable to spend on this project.

The atmosphere beyond the Earth is
different
and to search the various possibilities available in the Universe, it is vital to acquaint with it. This can
only
be possible by exploring it,
for example
, unlike the Earth, the
other
planets
are made
-up of gases,
some
are
extremely
cold
and
some
are
very
hot,
but
can we gain benefit out of it or not?
Therefore
, it is expedient that we
send
shuttles such as the NASA agency has recently
sent
one shuttle to the Mars planet to understand the expectancy of life there.

Undoubtedly
, these researches required funding in billions,
but
to remain silent would be more fatal
because
we can not
only
gain the knowledge of resources and opportunities available in outer world, it can
also
make
us aware about the possible threats.
For instance
, the satellites in the sky
keep
sending information and alerts to the scientists about the usual
as well
as unusual activities, which can
make
them aware in advance of any occurrence of any disaster
events
, which can be
prevented
by active approach.

Although, it is undeniable that exorbitant amount
is spent
on such related projects, the benefits in terms of knowing the unknown are prominent.
However
, in relation to the budget allocation to the
other
sectors, it is the responsibility of the
government
that those areas should
also
get
sufficient funds to flourish.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Someone suggests school to cut the Recycling. with this suggestion, explain why. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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