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People have different ways of escaping the stress and difficulties of modern life. Some read; some exercise; others work in their gardens. What do you think are the best ways of reducing stress? Use specific details and examples in your answer. v.1

People have different ways of escaping the stress and difficulties of modern life. Some read; some exercise; others work in their gardens. What do you think are the best ways of reducing stress? Use specific details and examples in your answer. v. 1
In present days, the majority of people can not get enough time for doing exercise in their daily life for many reasons like too busy with their work and unhealthy life return to them. In this essay. I will discuss about the factors of this issue and provide solutions. Nowadays, it is clear to see that the money, career achievement and the wealthy are essential to people living more than the healthy life. First or all, the huge amount of people think that they need to spend time on their work to fulfil their career goal and get successful so they are tending to do overtime working like more than 10-12 hours per day, then when they return to homes they always feel too tired to do exercise or lazy to go gym even on their work day off. Secondarily, some people will think it is wasting time to do the workout because exercise can not show the healthy results as fast as they already thought to these reasons many people give up so easily and leads them to permanent an unhealthy life. In my opinions, it is essential to make the society be realized to an importance of exercise for having a healthy life and there are many ways to solutions such as government should advertising to encourage people do workout at least few times every week and make media to make people aware of the drawbacks of an unhealthy life. Future more, the companies should provide their employees the fitness facilities or give the staffs discount coupons or gym membership to support people to exercise as well. In conclusion, Many people has lack of time for do exercise and have an unhealthy life because their busy working lifestyle, to resolve this problem we have to give them good knowledges of benefits from exercise and then they will tend to do more workout to improve their health.
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reasons like too busy with their work and
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life
return to them. In this essay. I will
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factors of this issue and provide solutions.

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clear
to
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that the money, career achievement and the wealthy are essential to
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people
living more than the healthy
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life
.
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or all, the huge amount of
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people
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think
that they need to spend
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time
on their work to fulfil their career goal and
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get
successful
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so
they are tending to do overtime working like more than 10-12 hours per day, then when they return to homes they always feel too tired to do
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exercise
or lazy to go gym even on their work day off.
Secondarily
,
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it is wasting
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the healthy results as
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give up
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easily
and leads them to permanent an
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unhealthy
life.

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the society
be realized
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exercise
for having a healthy
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life
and there are
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ways to solutions such as
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government
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do workout at least few
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times
every week and
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media to
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people
aware of the drawbacks of an
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unhealthy
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life
. Future more, the
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companies
should provide their employees the fitness facilities or give the staffs discount coupons or gym membership to support
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to
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as well
.

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exercise
and have an
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life
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because
their busy working lifestyle, to resolve this problem we
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give them
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knowledges
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exercise and
then they will tend to do more workout to
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their health.
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IELTS essay People have different ways of escaping the stress and difficulties of modern life. Some read; some exercise; others work in their gardens. What do you think are the best ways of reducing stress? Use specific details and examples in your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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