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Some young people look forward to a gear of travelling, a "gap year" before they begin work or university and see it as a chance to broaden their horizons. For others this is an expensive waste of time. Discuss both views and give your o v.1

Some young people look forward to a gear of travelling, a "gap year" before they begin work or university and see it as a chance to broaden their horizons. For others this is an expensive waste of time. 1
Education is a weapon which can be used to change the world for good. Few people opine that the fruits of good education depends on the quality of good teachers, whereas others believe that the academic success rests on the attitude of the students. Both arguments have their own viewpoints and a detailed analysis is required before arriving at any conclusion. Teachers are respected everywhere and in some cultures, (like India) are honoured more than god. They impart their knowledge and wisdom to the students who in turn form an integral part in the development of social circles and consequently help in building the nation. For example, famous leaders like Shashi Tharoor and Donald Trump never shy away to thank their school teachers for their guidance and support. Another reason why a teacher’s contribution can be attributed to a child’s triumph is because teachers are the second parents and, as a parent, teachers tries to give the best mental and emotional support to their students so that their students become a good human being too. On the other hand, few people argue that academic achievements are solely, the result of the student’s attitudeattitude. What’s more important is the ‘never give up’ attitude of the children. For example, renowned personalities like Albert Einstein and Steve Jobs never got the support from their teachers. They had a positive attitude and worked hard and reached the zenith of success. Another reason to support this argument is that, a teacher can only guide and explain about different things, but that may or may not be same for all the students, thereforetherefore few are always left behind that’s why if a child wants to achieve academic success, he/she must work hard. To sum up, the role of teachers in the development of students during their academic life cannot be underestimated, but I strongly support the fact that it is the attitude of a student which decides his/her success in life. A teacher can explain the method of doing any task, but they can’t force someone to do that task. That would depend entirely on the student.
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used
to
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change
the world for
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good
. Few
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people
opine that the fruits of
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good
education depends on the quality of
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good
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teachers
, whereas others believe that the
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academic
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success
rests on the
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attitude
of the
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students
. Both arguments have their
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own
viewpoints and a detailed analysis
is required
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before
arriving at any conclusion.

Teachers
are respected
everywhere and in
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some
cultures, (like India) are
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honoured
more than god. They impart their knowledge and wisdom to the
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students
who in turn form an integral part in the development of social circles and
consequently
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help
in building the nation.
For example
,
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famous
leaders like
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Shashi
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Tharoor
and Donald Trump never shy away to thank their school
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teachers
for their guidance and
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support
. Another reason why a
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teacher’s
contribution can
be attributed
to a child’s triumph is
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because
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teachers
are the second parents and, as a parent,
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teachers
tries to give the best mental and emotional
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support
to their
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students
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so
that their
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students
become a
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good
human being too.

On the other hand
, few
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people
argue that
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academic
achievements are
solely
, the result of the
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student’s
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attitudeattitude
. What’s more
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important
is the ‘never give up’
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attitude
of the children.
For example
, renowned personalities like Albert Einstein and Steve Jobs never
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got
the
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support
from their
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teachers
. They had a
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positive
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attitude
and worked
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hard
and reached the zenith of
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success
. Another reason to
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support
this argument is that, a
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teacher
can
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only
guide and
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explain
about
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different
things,
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but
that may or may not be same for all the
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students
,
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thereforetherefore
few are always
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left
behind that’s why if a child wants to achieve
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academic
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success
, he/she
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must
work
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hard
.

To sum up, the role of
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teachers
in the development of
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students
during their
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academic
life cannot
be underestimated
,
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but
I
strongly
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support
the fact that it is the
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attitude
of a
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student
which decides his/her
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success
in life. A
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teacher
can
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explain
the method of doing any task,
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but
they can’t force someone to do that task. That would depend
entirely
on the
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student
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some young people look forward to a gear of travelling, a "gap year" before they begin work or university and see it as a chance to broaden their horizons. For others this is an expensive waste of time. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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