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Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in countryside? What problems does this cause? What can be done to solve this problem? v.2

Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in countryside? What problems does this cause? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 2
Urban life has attracted many young people from rural areas over recent years. Today, a number of young individuals are moving from rural to urban in order to live. As a result of this, elderly people are continuing to live in rural places. This trend causes some problems such as overpopulation in cities and towns and a decrease in the productivity of agriculture. However, the government can solve these problems by investing in agriculture and facilities in the countryside. Living in urban areas is thought that it offers a variety of job opportunities and this result in the fact that young people, who live in rural places, lead to move to cities and towns. However, there are some problems which the trend creates. Firstly, overpopulation is a major concern for many cities due to the loss of attraction of the countryside. For instance, in Turkey, the number of people living in urban places has dramatically increased since 1990s. Secondly, the fact that rural places, where is the most important area to produce food, lost their popularity result in a decrease in the agricultural production. The reason is that rural people moved to cities and towns to have a higher life standard. Despite some problems, there are some solutions which the government can implement. Creating job opportunities in rural areas would be the most effective solution. For example, the government can build factories in those places so that young people work in the industry. In addition, the administrators can promote agriculture among youngsters. To illustrate, young people enjoy food production and live in the countryside if the government financially supports them, and introduce modern agricultural methods. In conclusion, rural life has gradually lost its popularity over a period of three decades. Youth prefer to live in cities and towns due to attractive opportunities and the trend is resulting in the overpopulation as a problem, and also the demise of agriculture. However, the government can address these problems related to population and agriculture by investing in rural areas young people to have a desire for rural life.
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over recent years.
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individuals are moving from
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to
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in order to
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.
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. This trend causes
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problems
such as overpopulation in
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and a decrease in the productivity of
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can solve these
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by investing in
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agriculture
and facilities in the countryside.

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is
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that it offers a variety of job opportunities and this result in the fact that
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, who
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which the trend creates.
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, overpopulation is a major concern for
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due to the loss of attraction of the countryside.
For instance
, in Turkey, the number of
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people
living in
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has
dramatically
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, where is the most
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to produce food, lost their popularity result in a decrease in the agricultural production. The reason is that
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standard.

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, there are
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solutions which the
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can implement. Creating job opportunities in
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would be the most effective solution.
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can build factories in those
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work in the industry.
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, the administrators can promote
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agriculture
among youngsters. To illustrate,
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people
enjoy food production and
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in the countryside if the
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financially
supports them, and introduce modern agricultural methods.

In conclusion
,
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has
gradually
lost its popularity over a period of three decades. Youth prefer to
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in
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and
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due to attractive opportunities and the trend is resulting in the overpopulation as a
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also
the demise of
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agriculture
.
However
, the
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can address these
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problems
related to population and
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agriculture
by investing in
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rural
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IELTS essay Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in countryside? What problems does this cause? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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