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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.23

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 23
It is important for countries to have a free health service for their citizens, even though it may be impossible to include certain medical treatments due to costs. I strongly agree with the view that every country should provide free health service for her citizens. Provision of free treatments by the government improves the overall quality of life of the citizens of such nation. This is because many people will want to visit the hospital as they are aware that payment is not needed in order to access treatments. As an illustration, Massey children's hospital experienced a surge in the number of patients when the government decided to make healthcare free for children. Also, provision of free health service reduces mortality rate in a country. Even though expensive medical treatment is excluded from the service, there will be an increase in the quantity of early diagnosis. Hence, timely medical intervention which in turn reduces the number of preventable deaths. Additionally, it is evident that the provision of free vaccines in many African countries has led to the eradication of preventable diseases like polio and chicken pox. Again, the availability of free medical services will encourage the citizens to pay tax which will enhance economic development of such countries. For example, in Uganda where there is no free medical care for anyone, it has been reported that the number of people that pay taxes have significantly decreased when compared to the amount of people that paid taxes during the previous government which made treatments free and accessible to all citizens. In conclusion, availability of free medical care will have many positive impacts on the overall quality of life of any country. Therefore, I strongly agree that all nations should make free medical care available to their citizens.
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service
for their
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citizens
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medical
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treatments
due to costs. I
strongly
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agree
with the view that every
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country
should provide
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free
health
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service
for her citizens.

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treatments
by the
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government
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improves
the
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quality of life of the
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citizens
of such nation. This is
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because
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many
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people
will want to visit the hospital as they are aware that payment is not needed in order to access
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treatments
. As an illustration, Massey children's hospital experienced a surge in the number of patients when the
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government
decided to
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healthcare
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free
for children.

Also
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health
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service
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reduces
mortality rate in a
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country
.
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expensive
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medical
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treatment
is excluded
from the
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service
, there will be an increase in the quantity of early diagnosis.
Hence
, timely
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medical
intervention which in turn
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reduces
the number of preventable deaths.
Additionally
, it is evident that the provision of
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free
vaccines in
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many
African
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countries
has led to the eradication of preventable diseases like polio and chicken pox.

Again, the availability of
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free
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medical
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services
will encourage the
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citizens
to pay tax which will enhance economic development of such
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countries
.
For example
, in Uganda where there is no
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free
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medical
care for anyone, it has
been reported
that the number of
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people
that pay taxes have
significantly
decreased when compared to the amount of
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people
that paid taxes during the previous
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government
which made
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treatments
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free
and accessible to all citizens.

In conclusion
, availability of
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free
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medical
care will have
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many
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positive
impacts on the
overall
quality of life of any
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country
.
Therefore
, I
strongly
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agree
that all nations should
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make
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free
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medical
care available to their
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citizens
.
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IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 23

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
296 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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