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Some university students choose to take difficult classes even if they know they might not get a good grade in the class. Other students prefer to take easier classes in which they know they will get a good grade. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v.1

Some university students choose to take difficult classes even if they know they might not get a good grade in the class. Other students prefer to take easier classes in which they know they will get a good grade. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1
Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female pupils in any subject. Accordingly, a couple of reasons in agreement and disagreement will be explored in this essay. Conspicuously, accepting male and female pupils in equal quantities is not a rational choice because they can be an adverse distraction for one another. For instance, since 1991 IRAN universities separated male and female in two varied faculties and they have had a fabulous experience in such field. Additionally, science experts believe that the less distraction pupils have in their universities, the more precious triumph they will achieve. Thus, it is assumed that each university should accept solely males or females and not both of them equally. Indisputably, men and women should have equal right to be accepted in any university and class, because discrimination is not acceptable in societies. Experts asserted that turning a blind eye to a specific gender will have an adverse impression on young individuals who tend to pursue education in universities. In addition, it is about time universities let pupils assert their capabilities either male or female with equal numbers. Further more, discrimination will cultivate them with bad tempers and provide mental issues. It is evident that the number of women is enhanced and they should pursue their education in universities the same as men. By way of illustration, in IRAN the number of women are far more than men and universities initiated to accept one million female and Male pupils annually since 2018. It is argued that if only Iranian universities were aware of such boosting of women population before. Hence, pupils would rather have equal educational amenities for men and women in their university. In summary, universities should accept an an equivalent number of female and male pupils in any subject. I am a firm believer that if only government built far spacious universities to accept more pupils in equal numbers.
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of male and
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pupils
in any subject.
Accordingly
, a couple of reasons in agreement and disagreement will
be explored
in this essay.

Conspicuously
, accepting male and
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female
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pupils
in
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equal
quantities is not a rational choice
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because
they can be an adverse distraction for one another.
For instance
, since 1991 IRAN
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universities
separated male and
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female
in two varied
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faculties and
they have had a fabulous experience in such field.
Additionally
, science experts believe that the less distraction
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pupils
have in their
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universities
, the more precious triumph they will achieve.
Thus
, it
is assumed
that each
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university
should
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accept
solely
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males
or
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females
and not both of them
equally
.

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,
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men
and
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women
should have
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equal
right to be
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accepted
in any
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university
and
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class
,
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because
discrimination is not acceptable in societies. Experts asserted that turning a blind eye to a specific gender will have an adverse impression on young individuals who tend to pursue education in
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universities
.
In addition
, it is about time
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universities
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let
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pupils
assert their capabilities either male or
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female
with
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equal
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numbers
.
Further
more, discrimination will cultivate them with
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bad
tempers and provide mental issues.

It is evident that the
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number
of
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women
is
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enhanced and
they should pursue their education in
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universities
the same as
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men
. By way of illustration, in IRAN the
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number
of
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women
are far more than
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men
and
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universities
initiated to
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accept
one million
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female
and Male
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pupils
annually
since 2018. It
is argued
that if
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only
Iranian
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universities
were aware of such boosting of
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women
population
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before
.
Hence
,
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pupils
would
rather
have
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equal
educational amenities for
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men
and
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women
in their university.

In summary,
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an an
equivalent
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of
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female
and male
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pupils
in any subject. I am a firm believer that if
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only
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government
built far spacious
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to
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accept
more
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pupils
in
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IELTS essay Some university students choose to take difficult classes even if they know they might not get a good grade in the class. Other students prefer to take easier classes in which they know they will get a good grade. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
316 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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