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TPO 31 - Question 2Some university students choose to take difficult classes even if they know they might not get a good grade in the class. Other students prefer to take easier classes in which they know they will get a good grade. Which do you prefer? E v.1

TPO 31 - Question 2Some university students choose to take difficult classes even if they know they might not get a good grade in the class. Other students prefer to take easier classes in which they know they will get a good grade. Which do you prefer? E v. 1
It is the choice that people make between good and popular. Some people love to be associated with their famous figures, such as sports persons, comedians, actors, and others. However, there is a school of thought which believes that contributions of scientists are as well as other popular figures. This essay takes a neutral stance on both types of heroes. There are several reasons why the contributions of great scientists cannot be ignored, to begin with. Humankind has evolved from an early primitive stage to the glitter of this modern world. Scientists have strived untiringly to make our life easier and comfortable in every walk of life. For example, we would have been roaming to hunt animals to feed ourselves and died this way had there been no inventions or innovations. Furthermore, scientists are instrumental in making this world a better place to live. On the flip side, entertainers have a different role to play when compared. Our day-to-day life works on happiness, passion, emotion, stress, and other psychological triggers. These entertainers give a reason for a smile on the face. People are stressed from their nine-to-five jobs, and they find solace and blitheness when they watch their entertainers doing their roles. In my opinion, it is a battle between popularity and good. Entertainers are closer to the hearts of people as they are generally more covered on television, the internet, newspapers, and magazines. While scientists live with us daily, but they are hidden and unidentified behind the curtains. A classic example is that the youth gravitate more to Tom Cruise than Albert Einstein. In conclusion, it is indeed entertainers are more remembered and loved than scientists. Both have specific roles in our lives, but the latter is, at times, unfortunate to receive the lesser honour and recognition in society.
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people
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between
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good
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Some
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people
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love
to
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with their
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famous
figures, such as sports persons, comedians, actors,
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and others
.
However
, there is a school of
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thought
which believes that contributions of
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scientists
are
as well
as other popular figures. This essay takes a neutral stance on both types of heroes.

There are several reasons why the contributions of great
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scientists
cannot be
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ignored
, to
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begin
with. Humankind has evolved from an early primitive stage to the glitter of this modern world.
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Scientists
have strived
untiringly
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
our life easier and comfortable in every walk of life.
For example
, we would have been roaming to hunt animals to feed ourselves and
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died
this way had there been no inventions or innovations.
Furthermore
,
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scientists
are instrumental in making this world a better place to
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live
.

On the flip side,
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entertainers
have a
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different
role to play when compared. Our day-to-day life works on happiness, passion, emotion,
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stress
, and other psychological triggers. These
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entertainers
give a reason for a smile on the face.
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People
are
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stressed
from their nine-to-five jobs, and they find solace and blitheness when they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
their
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entertainers
doing their roles.

In my opinion, it is a battle between popularity and
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good
.
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Entertainers
are closer to the hearts of
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people
as they are
generally
more covered on television, the internet, newspapers, and magazines. While
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scientists
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
with us daily,
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but
they
are hidden
and unidentified behind the curtains. A classic example is that the youth gravitate more to Tom Cruise than Albert Einstein.

In conclusion
, it is
indeed
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entertainers
are more remembered and
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loved
than
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scientists
. Both have specific roles in our
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lives
,
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but
the latter is, at times, unfortunate to receive the lesser
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honour
and recognition in society.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TPO 31 - Question 2Some university students choose to take difficult classes even if they know they might not get a good grade in the class. Other students prefer to take easier classes in which they know they will get a good grade. Which do you prefer? E v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
300 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
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Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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