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If your university plans to improve the life of students by one of the following methods, which one do you prefer? Building a new cafeteria, building a new indoor swimming pool or making improvements of dormitories? v.1

If your university plans to improve the life of students by one of the following methods, which one do you prefer? Building a new cafeteria, building a new indoor swimming pool or making improvements of dormitories? v. 1
People need to adapt foreign languages if they choose to stay out of their home country. It may pose threats to certain extent in living as well as the social issue in living abroad. There are both sides of the argument - agree or disagree- in this article about the living with a foreign language in a foreign country. I support both sides of the argument, but I think people should be positive about living abroad with different language. I am accord with the inconvenience of communicating in non-native language regardless of the fluency. It is needless to say that second language is not the same as the native language. According to the linguistic perspectives, "It is inevitable to cause confusion among languages. The more people learned, the more they will get confused easily during their translation of different language. " Chinese people usually get misunderstood between the pronoun, he and she, as the pronoun only has one word in Mandarin. People usually make mistakes unconsciously when they speak in foreign languages. However, more and more people realize the fact of globalization, which leads to the corporation of the people around the world. For instance, a dominant language, which may be also foreign language of the local people, is widely accepted by local people even though it is not their mother tongue. Take European Union as an example. Most membership countries talk in English rather than their own country's language. English is not the native language for the most of them, but it does not influence their talk to make decisions. Therefore, effective communication will be reached despite the difficulty in using different languages. A lot of people nowadays choose to live out of their countries no matter if they have learnt the local language. I believe language may cause certain barriers in adapting local lifestyle but it will not cause dramatic tragedy as long as the person is aware of what they talk about. To sum up, language limitation is not the major difficulty in overcoming foreign life. People should be optimistic to accept the challenge in living as expatriates in the foreign countries.
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if they choose to stay out of their home
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. It may pose threats to certain extent in
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living
as well
as the social issue in
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living
abroad. There are both sides of the argument
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or disagree- in this article about the
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living
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foreign
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language
in a
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foreign
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country
. I support both sides of the argument,
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think
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people
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positive
about
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living
abroad with
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different
language.

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language
regardless of the fluency. It is needless to say that second
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language
is not the same as the native
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language
. According to the linguistic perspectives,
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languages
. The more
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people
learned, the more they will
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get
confused
easily
during their translation of
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language
.
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Chinese
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people
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when they speak in
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foreign
languages.

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, more and more
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people
realize the fact of globalization, which leads to the corporation of the
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people
around the world.
For instance
, a dominant
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language
, which may be
also
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language
of the
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people
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talk in English
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. English is not the native
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for the most of them,
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languages.

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nowadays choose to
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out of their
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countries
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local
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. I believe
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lifestyle
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language
limitation is not the major difficulty in overcoming
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foreign
life.
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should be optimistic to accept the challenge in
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living
as expatriates in the
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.
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IELTS essay If your university plans to improve the life of students by one of the following methods, which one do you prefer? Building a new cafeteria, building a new indoor swimming pool or making improvements of dormitories? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
355 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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