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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? v.8

Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 8
Recently, online courses are being offered by universities all around the globe to allow distance learning for students. This development can only be seen as positive since it benefits countless students. Online courses are mainly beneficial to students who cannot attend their universities due to living somewhere far or being unhealthy. A lot of students who come from rural areas find it hard to adapt to city life where the university is situated, therefore they suffer from homesickness. By offering courses online, those students are not forced to move into the university’s campus and can study their courses comfortably in their homes. This leads to happier and less stressed students who can do well academically. Moreover, unhealthy students who suffer from diseases that force them to be bedridden or who stay in hospitals can greatly benefit from learning online. If courses were not available online, those individuals would not be able to obtain a university degree. On the other hand, nothing is compared to being taught by a teacher in a real classroom. Students who attend classes can engage in meaningful discussions and ask questions, which is impossible to do in online classes. Additionally, the academic environment of universities can encourage students to study efficiently and work harder. For example, when students mix with their peers, they can learn new things and brainstorm ideas. Furthermore, easy access to useful facilities in universities, such as libraries and research centers is undeniably beneficial to one’s academic progress. In conclusion, offering online courses is certainly a positive development especially for unhealthy people as well as those who live in rural areas and want to study at a university. However, normal students who are able to go to universities should not use online courses as a substitute for university lectures.
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universities
all around the globe to
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distance learning for
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students
. This development can
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positive
since it benefits countless students.

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courses
are
mainly
beneficial to
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students
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who
cannot attend their
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universities
due to living somewhere far or being unhealthy.
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students
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who
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come
from rural areas find it
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hard
to adapt to city life where the
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university
is situated
,
therefore
they suffer from homesickness. By offering
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courses
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online
, those
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students
are not forced to
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move
into the
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university’s
campus and can study their
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courses
comfortably
in their homes. This leads to happier and less
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stressed
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students
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who
can do well
academically
.
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students
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who
suffer from diseases that force them to be bedridden or
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who
stay in hospitals can
greatly
benefit from learning
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online
. If
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courses
were not available
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online
, those individuals would not be able to obtain a
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university
degree.

On the other hand
, nothing
is compared
to
being taught
by a teacher in a real classroom.
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Students
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who
attend classes can engage in meaningful discussions and ask questions, which is impossible to do in
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online
classes.
Additionally
, the academic environment of
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universities
can encourage
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students
to study
efficiently
and work harder.
For example
, when
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students
mix with their peers, they can learn new things and brainstorm
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ideas
.
Furthermore
, easy access to useful facilities in
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universities
, such as libraries and research centers is
undeniably
beneficial to one’s academic progress.

In conclusion
, offering
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online
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courses
is
certainly
a
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positive
development
especially
for unhealthy
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people
as well
as those
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who
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live
in rural areas and want to study at a
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university
.
However
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students
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who
are able to go to
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universities
should not
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use
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online
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courses
as a substitute for
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university
lectures.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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