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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? v.8

Try to think as far back as you can, selling of products have always needed to entice customers. Sellers try hard to convince people in the street, on the television, on social media, and what not. In this passage we will see why some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Sellers don't know, and also don't care if the person they are approaching really needs their product. When this happens there are 4 outcomes, the person rejects the offer because he doesn't need it, accepts the offer as he has been looking forward to buy it, reject the offer because he can't afford it, and accepts the offer because the salesman sold it. When the 4th outcome occurs, this results into unnecessarily buying stuff we actually don't need. Advertisements only helps the sellers not the buyers. A logical reasoning behind advertisment only benefits sellers is that that sellers have to pay for the adverstiment and that's why it is known as an investment in their product. Advertising is not a social service that it will help people. It is not even a win-win situation for buyers and sellers. If a buyer wants to buy a particular thing which he/she actually needs then they are going to search for it, but the problem is even curiously searching for things on google we don't need is recorded by google or facebook or some other companies like these. These companies will them constantly prompt you with the advertisements related to your last few searches and almost convincing you to buy that particular product even though we don't need it. Many have been the victim of this forceful selling of products.
Try to
think
as far back as you can, selling of
products
have always needed to entice customers.
Sellers
try
hard
to convince
people
in the street, on the television, on social media, and what not. In this passage we will
see
why
some
people
say that advertising encourages us to
buy
things that we
really
do not need.

Sellers
don't
know, and
also
don't
care if the person they are approaching
really
needs
their
product
. When this happens there are 4 outcomes, the person rejects the
offer
because
he doesn't
need
it, accepts the
offer
as he has been looking forward to
buy
it, reject the
offer
because
he can't afford it, and accepts the
offer
because
the salesman sold it. When the 4th outcome occurs, this results into
unnecessarily
buying stuff we actually
don't
need
. Advertisements
only
helps
the
sellers
not the buyers.

A logical reasoning behind
advertisment
only
benefits
sellers
is that that
sellers
have to
pay for the
adverstiment
and that's why it
is known
as an investment in their
product
. Advertising is not a social service that it will
help
people
. It is not even a win-win situation for buyers and sellers.

If a buyer wants to
buy
a particular thing which he/she actually
needs
then they are going to search for it,
but
the problem is even
curiously
searching for things on google we
don't
need
is recorded
by google or
facebook
or
some
other
companies
like these. These
companies
will them
constantly
prompt you with the advertisements related to your last few searches and almost convincing you to
buy
that particular
product
even though
we
don't
need
it.
Many
have been the victim of this forceful selling of
products
.
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IELTS essay Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
5.5
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