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Some universities now offer their courses on the internet so that people can study online. Is this positive or negative development? v.18

Some universities now offer their courses on the internet so that people can study online. Is this positive or negative development? v. 18
The Internet is increasingly becoming popular day by day. It is stated that, nowadays, certain universities provide their courses related to concerned subjects on online. I personally believe, online courses have many positive aspects. However, this also has some negative aspects. This essay will explain, firstly, benefits of online education and, secondly, problems associated with it before reaching a conclusion. Due to technological innovation, it has become much easier for universities offer education on the internet. There are numerous benefits related to this. Firstly, it is now easily accessible to grant a higher level of knowledge through the internet, which saves a lot of money. For example, people from poor backgrounds cannot afford for higher education, so for them it is very beneficial. Another merit, is people can learn different lessons from different tutors and, whenever they prefer. Finally, it intensifies their typing speed rather than writing with a copy, which is very useful in today's world. There are comparatively few drawbacks related to online courses. First of all, it shortens the bonding with colleagues and, others. For instance, young people depending on internet for educational information does not get out anymore from the room, which eventually mitigate their relationships and, interactions with friends and, remain isolated all the time. In conclusion, In my opinion, online course is a positive development which offers a huge benefit to the people, although it comprises a few disadvantages. In fact, online education will bring even more advantages to the people with the passage of time.
The Internet is
increasingly
becoming popular day by day. It
is stated
that, nowadays, certain universities provide their
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courses
related to concerned subjects on
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online
. I
personally
believe,
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online
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courses
have
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many
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positive
aspects.
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, this
also
has
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some
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negative
aspects. This essay will
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explain
,
firstly
, benefits of
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online
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education
and,
secondly
, problems associated with it
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before
reaching a conclusion.

Due to technological innovation, it has become much easier for universities offer
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education
on the internet. There are numerous benefits related to this.
Firstly
, it is
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now
easily
accessible to grant a higher level of knowledge through the internet, which saves
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a lot of
money.
For example
,
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people
from poor backgrounds cannot afford for higher
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education
,
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so
for them it is
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very
beneficial. Another merit, is
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people
can learn
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different
lessons from
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different
tutors and, whenever they prefer.
Finally
, it intensifies their typing speed
rather
than writing with a copy, which is
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very
useful in
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today
's world.

There are
comparatively
few drawbacks related to
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online
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courses
.
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First of all
, it shortens the bonding with colleagues and, others.
For instance
, young
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people
depending on internet for educational information does not
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get
out
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anymore
from the room, which
eventually
mitigate their relationships and, interactions with friends and, remain isolated all the time.

In conclusion
, In my opinion,
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online
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course
is a
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positive
development which offers a huge benefit to the
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people
, although it comprises a few disadvantages. In fact,
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online
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education
will bring even more advantages to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
with the passage of time.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some universities now offer their courses on the internet so that people can study online. Is this positive or negative development? v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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