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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.17

Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 17
Nowadays, technology dominates our life. Through it, everything can share like Knowledge, experience and even learning. Developed universities used internet technology to support a new type of learning called online learning. It’s a new methodology offered to teach the students from anywhere. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this method. On the one hand, some people argue that online learning is totally different from real learning and not achieve learning goals. They state that the certifications token from the online universities after graduation are not approved in many organizations in the world. Also, we cannot compare online learning with learning in the classroom. Classroom learning provides a more equipped place allows students to understand and interact with the teacher in a perfect manner. That is why many people do not prefer to learn online. By contrast, some students really need this method to learn, because they reside in far places or villages. So, learning from the home comes to solve this problem for them and lets them achieve their dreams from distant. In addition, there is no doubt that online learning is a much easier and convenient way to learn or even work. Learning from a distance allows worker persons to study and work at the same time. It facilitates the tasks by letting them work at the specified time from the company and studying at any time they want. This proves clearly that online learning is necessary for many students. To conclude, after displaying both points of view, I believe that online learning is an important need for several students around the world. And it helps students to complete their studies.
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learning
. Developed universities
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used
internet technology to support a new type of
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learning
called
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online
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learning
. It’s a new methodology offered to teach the
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students
from anywhere. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this method.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
argue that
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online
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learning
is
totally
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different
from real
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learning
and not achieve
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learning
goals. They state that the certifications token from the
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online
universities after graduation are not approved in
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many
organizations in the world.
Also
, we cannot compare
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online
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learning
with
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learning
in the classroom. Classroom
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learning
provides a more equipped place
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allows
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students
to understand and interact with the teacher
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in a perfect manner
.
That is
why
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many
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people
do not prefer to learn online.

By contrast,
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some
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students
really
need this method to learn,
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because
they reside in far places or villages.
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,
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learning
from the home
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comes
to solve this problem for them and
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lets
them achieve their dreams from distant.
In addition
, there is no doubt that
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online
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learning
is a much easier and convenient way to learn or even work.
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Learning
from a distance
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allows
worker persons to study and work at the same time. It facilitates the tasks by letting them work at the specified time from the
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company
and studying at any time they want. This proves
clearly
that
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online
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learning
is necessary for
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many
students.

To conclude
, after displaying both points of view, I believe that
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online
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learning
is an
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important
need for several
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students
around the world. And it
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helps
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students
to complete their studies.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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