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Some universities hold classes Monday through Thursday, while others holdthem from Monday through Friday. Which do you prefer, and why? v.2

Some universities hold classes Monday through Thursday, while others holdthem from Monday through Friday. Which do you prefer, and why? v. 2
It is supposed that, affluent countries should oblige the shoddier populace with materialistic things like food and edification. The underlying fact is that one gets a tag of poor, by not accumulating wealth or sufficing basic needs to live a good life. In my opinion the government should be responsible to manage their inhabitants of such country. Firstly the concept of being rich and poor has crucial role in the development of an individual or on the whole a nation. Rich can easily afford material things to the needy one, but gradually tumbles down the ability of the poor country to stand alone and develop itself with what resources it has, perhaps which they may not be aware. Another fact is getting one time aid is stress-free task, eventually which is arduous to manage on a long run. To illustrate this, any metro city has an ability to meet the necessity for food, shelter and education of a poor village once or twice, but difficult to meet at daily basis. Further emphasizing it, local authority can meet their requirements, not by demanding help from wealthy, but mere adaptation with the nature and available resources could provide benefits in the long run. By doing so it helps the habitant to enhance their skills and survival tactics. Encourage them in agriculture and animal husbandry, handicrafts et cetera. If an individual will succeed in such activity so does the nation. To conclude, I think rich and poor nations barrier should be removed and leading a contented life rather should be prioritized by the local authority. Education does help but the skills and adaptations of nature also is a sustainable approach to a good life.
It
is supposed
that, affluent countries should oblige the shoddier populace with materialistic things like food and edification. The underlying fact is that one
gets
a tag of
poor
, by not accumulating wealth or sufficing basic needs to
live
a
good
life. In my opinion the
government
should be responsible to manage their inhabitants of such country.

Firstly
the concept of being rich and
poor
has crucial role in the development of an individual or
on the whole
a nation. Rich can
easily
afford material things to the needy one,
but
gradually
tumbles down the ability of the
poor
country to stand alone and develop itself with what resources it has, perhaps which they may not be aware. Another fact is getting one time aid is
stress
-free task,
eventually
which is arduous to manage on a long run. To illustrate this, any metro city has an ability to
meet
the necessity for food, shelter and education of a
poor
village once or twice,
but
difficult to
meet
at daily basis.

Further
emphasizing it, local authority can
meet
their requirements, not by demanding
help
from wealthy,
but
mere adaptation with the nature and available resources could provide benefits in the long run. By doing
so
it
helps
the habitant to enhance their
skills
and survival tactics. Encourage them in agriculture and animal husbandry,
handicrafts et
cetera. If an individual will succeed in such activity
so
does the nation.

To conclude
, I
think
rich and
poor
nations
barrier should
be removed
and leading a contented life
rather
should
be prioritized
by the local authority. Education does
help
but
the
skills
and adaptations of nature
also
is a sustainable approach to a
good
life.
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IELTS essay Some universities hold classes Monday through Thursday, while others holdthem from Monday through Friday. Which do you prefer, and why? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
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