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6. Some universities hold classes Monday through Thursday, while others holdthem from Monday through Friday. Which do you prefer, and why? v.1

6. Some universities hold classes Monday through Thursday, while others holdthem from Monday through Friday. Which do you prefer, and why? v. 1
The use of radioactive elements to power homes has been a hot topic of debate for decades. Some believe that nuclear energy does more harm than good while others believe in its contrast. I completely agree with the latter as it reduces our dependency on limited energy sources and is more feasible for even developing countries. To begin with, we all know that limited natural resources like coal and petroleum have been in use since the industrial revolution. At the current rate of its usage our next generation might only be able to see these in museums. These sources also cause a lot of pollution and are less efficient as compared to nuclear energy. For example, the USA currently owns nuclear powered ships and submarines which can function for fifty straight years as compared to coal powered ships which consumes two tons of coal every day. Thus, nuclear energy is more efficient and mitigates consumption of limited energy sources. In addition, although setting up nuclear plants might be expensive, in the long run it turns out to be more economical. For example, India, which is still a developing country has invested heavily in Nuclear deals as nuclear power has proven the long term gain. India has also invested in energy sources like solar, wind and hydroelectric but the power throughput cannot meet the demand. Therefore, establishing Nuclear plants is even more feasible for developing countries than setting up alternate source plants at a massive scale. In conclusion, thermonuclear energy is a boon for the planet as it helps us preserve other depleting resources and also are more economical in the long run.
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use
of radioactive elements to power homes has been a hot topic of debate for decades.
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Some
believe that nuclear
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energy
does more harm than
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good
while others believe in its contrast. I completely
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agree
with the latter as it
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reduces
our dependency on limited
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energy
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sources
and is more feasible for even
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developing countries
.

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begin
with, we all know that limited natural resources like coal and petroleum have been in
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use
since the industrial revolution. At the
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current
rate of its usage our
next
generation might
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only
be able to
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see
these in museums. These
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sources
also
cause
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a lot of
pollution and are less efficient as compared to nuclear
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energy
.
For example
, the USA
currently
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owns
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nuclear powered
ships and submarines which can function for fifty straight years as compared to coal powered ships which consumes two tons of coal every day.
Thus
, nuclear
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energy
is more efficient and mitigates consumption of limited
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energy
sources.

In addition
, although setting up nuclear plants might be expensive, in the long run it turns out to be more economical.
For example
, India, which is
still
a
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developing country
has invested
heavily
in Nuclear deals as nuclear power has proven the long term gain. India has
also
invested in
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energy
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sources
like solar, wind and hydroelectric
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but
the power throughput cannot
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meet
the demand.
Therefore
, establishing Nuclear plants is even more feasible for
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developing countries
than setting up alternate
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source
plants at a massive scale.

In conclusion
, thermonuclear
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energy
is a boon for the planet as it
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helps
us preserve other depleting resources and
also
are more economical in the long run.
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IELTS essay 6. Some universities hold classes Monday through Thursday, while others holdthem from Monday through Friday. Which do you prefer, and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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