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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: "It is better to read books on an electronic device then it is to read traditional books on paper v.1

: "It is better to read books on an electronic device then it is to read traditional books on paper v. 1
In todays generation, with the growing technology and changing lifestyle we have incurred various options and choices in our lives. In the following discussion, I shall be highlighting the advantages and drawback of the option we have welcomed in our lives. As with the new mode of human style, and changes in the technology we have developed many choices for yourself and we have learned to live with a lifestyle. As we have many benefits of new outlook. For instance, Selecting things have made our life more effective by helping us know the details of any product we purchase. We did not have much of an option to look and select. And we use to buy what we wanted. We utilised the only item available in the market. That had made our life monotonous. The important benefits of having a variety of products, goods or services is we can filter it and understand the product completely before making a deal for it and compare it with multiple items. Which gives us a clear picture about the thing which we need to purchase. For example: If we want to buy a mobile phone in todays generation, we have so many available phones of different other company that we can compare the feature among themselves and understand it, Like the battery capacity, Ram, operating system and storage capacity and according to our needs and usage we can make a choice. Consequently, there are certain sets, back of having multiple options in one's life. It makes human beings more confusing to select anything and it happens so that, person delays the process. To conclude, I would say having choices is beneficial for entire mankind.
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todays
generation, with the growing technology and changing lifestyle we have incurred various
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options
and choices in our
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lives
. In the following discussion, I shall be highlighting the advantages and drawback of the
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option
we have welcomed in our
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lives
.

As with the new mode of human style, and
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changes
in the technology we have developed
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many
choices for
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yourself and
we have learned to
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live
with a lifestyle.
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As
we have
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many
benefits of new outlook.

For instance
, Selecting things have made our life more effective by helping us know the
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details
of any product we
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purchase
. We did not have much of an
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option
to look and select. And we
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use to
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buy
what we wanted. We
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utilised
the
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only
item available in the market. That had made our life monotonous. The
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important
benefits of having a variety of products,
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goods
or services is we can filter it and understand the product completely
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before
making a deal for it and compare it with multiple items.
“Which” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Which
gives us a
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clear
picture about the thing which we need to
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purchase
.
For example
: If we want to
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buy
a mobile phone in
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todays
generation, we have
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so
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many
available phones of
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different
other
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company
that we can compare the feature among themselves and understand it, Like the battery capacity, Ram, operating system and storage capacity and according to our needs and usage we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a choice.

Consequently
, there are certain sets, back of having multiple
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
options
in one's life. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
human beings more confusing to select anything and it happens
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that, person delays the process.

To conclude
, I would say having choices is beneficial for entire mankind.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay : "It is better to read books on an electronic device then it is to read traditional books on paper v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
281 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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