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Some universities hold classes Monday through Thursday, while others hold them from Monday through Friday. Which do you prefer, and why? v.1

Some universities hold classes Monday through Thursday, while others hold them from Monday through Friday. Which do you prefer, and why? v. 1
In the Modern World, Obesity is considered as one of the primary factors of being unhealthy. These days the growth in the number of obese people putting the medical fields into the worst situations to deal with the problems involved. Some people think that the most effective way to solve the issue is by implementing regular exercises in schools. This essay will argue why physical education is a key to the problem. The primary way of handling the case is to introduce exercise classes in schools. Implementing such initiatives at the school level will help people to stay fit from an early age of their lives. For instance, A Recent poll conducted by National Health Organization states that more than 25% of people who were doing daily exercises from school life are mentally and physically stronger than compared to others who won't follow. Overall, sowing above practice is a key way to bolster health conditions. In addition, another approach to reduce health issues is to make people sign-up in various extra-circular activities; making them to participate in sports, such as Kabaddi, Badminton and various other fat burning games. Playing such kind of games along with parents not only bolster their metabolism levels, but also strengthen up their cognitive thinking. Indeed, A recent survey by the World Health Organization suggests that people who engaged with sports in their routine lives are 25% healthier than others who couldn't make up burning their fat levels. Overall, Sports and extra-circular activities are the two other things that take part in stabilizing our lives. In conclusion, In order to deal with the increasing population of obese people, changing lifestyle of the coming generations by introducing regular exercises and sports in the schools is certainly the best and long lasting process to improve their deteriorating health conditions.
In the Modern World, Obesity
is considered
as one of the primary factors of being unhealthy. These days the growth in the number of obese
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people
putting the medical fields into the worst situations to deal with the problems involved.
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Some
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people
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think
that the most effective way to solve the issue is by implementing regular
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exercises
in
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schools
. This essay will argue why physical education is a key to the problem.

The primary way of handling the case is to introduce
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exercise
classes in
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schools
. Implementing such initiatives at the
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school
level will
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help
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people
to stay fit from an early age of their
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lives
.
For instance
, A Recent poll conducted by National
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Health
Organization states that more than 25% of
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people
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who
were doing daily
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exercises
from
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school
life are mentally and
physically
stronger than compared to others
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who
won't follow.
Overall
, sowing above practice is a key way to bolster
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health
conditions.

In addition
, another approach to
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reduce
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health
issues is to
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make
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people
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sign
-up in various extra-circular activities; making them to participate in
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sports
, such as
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Kabaddi
, Badminton and various
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other
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fat
burning games. Playing such kind of games along with parents not
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only
bolster their metabolism levels,
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but
also
strengthen up their cognitive thinking.
Indeed
, A recent survey by the World
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Health
Organization suggests that
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people
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who
engaged with
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sports
in their routine
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lives
are 25% healthier than others
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who
couldn't
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make
up burning their
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fat
levels.
Overall
,
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Sports
and extra-circular activities are the two
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other
things that
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take part
in stabilizing our
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lives
.

In conclusion
, In order to deal with the increasing population of obese
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people
, changing lifestyle of the coming generations by introducing regular
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exercises
and
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sports
in the
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schools
is
certainly
the best and
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long lasting
process to
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improve
their deteriorating
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health
conditions.
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IELTS essay Some universities hold classes Monday through Thursday, while others hold them from Monday through Friday. Which do you prefer, and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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