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Some universities have large, lecture-based classes, whereas others have smaller, discussion-based classes. Which do you think is better and why? Includedetails and examples to support your explanation. v.1

Some universities have large, lecture-based classes, whereas others have smaller, discussion-based classes. Which do you think is better and why? Includedetails and examples to support your explanation. v. 1
It is often thought that the amount of remuneration is the most compelling reason while opting a profession. In my opinion, I do not agree with this view because work life balance and sense of contentment are important factors at the time of taking positions in any business organization. One of the main concerns for any employee is the extent of happiness at the start of the work. In other words, the amount of salary could be one part of it; however, prestigious position, working conditions, and relation to the management are few of the things that need to be considered first. For instance, one of the surveys published by Oxford university stated that a quarter third of the private employees are unhappy with their current jobs due to miserable working conditions, despite having telephone figure salaries. Thus, it gives an overview that the contentment does not totally depend upon the wages. Another established factor is the work life balance, which is crucial for any worker. As a matter of fact, relaxed schedule of duty, minimum work load and a good number of allowed leaves are indispensable for any individual to lead a happy life. More would be the person spend time with family, more would be his level of satisfaction. Moreover, the relations with the supervisors and the higher management plays a critical role in performing office tasks. If a relationship with manager is based on respect, labour will work by heart with full energy without any complaint. Therefore, it is completely clear that the number of working hours and better colleagues are indispensable. In conclusion, although it is argued that the money is the only factor related to pursuing the work, I believe that the working environment and the availability of free time are more crucial and need to be addressed by the labours before deciding to choose any company.
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thought
that the amount of remuneration is the most compelling reason while opting a profession. In my opinion, I do not
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agree
with this view
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because
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work life
balance and sense of contentment are
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important
factors at the time of taking positions in any business organization.

One of the main concerns for any employee is the extent of happiness at the
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start
of the
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work
.
In other words
, the amount of salary could be one part of it;
however
, prestigious position,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
conditions, and relation to the management are few of the things that need to
be considered
first
.
For instance
, one of the surveys published by Oxford university stated that a quarter third of the private employees are unhappy with their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
jobs due to miserable
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working
conditions, despite having telephone figure salaries.
Thus
, it gives an overview that the contentment does not
totally
depend upon the wages.

Another established factor is the
It seems that a hyphen is missing.
work life
balance, which is crucial for any worker. As a matter of fact, relaxed schedule of duty, minimum
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work
load and a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
number of
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allowed
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leaves
are indispensable for any individual to lead a happy life. More would be the person spend time with family, more would be his level of satisfaction.
Moreover
, the relations with the supervisors and the higher management plays a critical role in performing office tasks. If a relationship with manager
is based
on respect,
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labour
will
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work
by heart with full energy without any complaint.
Therefore
, it is completely
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clear
that the number of
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working
hours and better colleagues are indispensable.

In conclusion
, although it
is argued
that the money is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
factor related to pursuing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
, I believe that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
environment and the availability of free time are more crucial and need to
be addressed
by the
Possible spelling mistake. 'labours' is British English.
labours
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before
deciding to choose any
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company
.
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IELTS essay Some universities have large, lecture-based classes, whereas others have smaller, discussion-based classes. Which do you think is better and why? Includedetails and examples to support your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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