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Some think that resident should be responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others says it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.3

Some think that resident should be responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others says it is the government’s responsibility. 3
Tourists often claim that specific areas in some cities are untidy and in decay. This issue, then affects also residents’ life quality, as they cannot dispose of public parks and gardens nearby their houses. So, they blame the government due to the lack of maintenance of those spaces. Public gardens cannot be incentivized by private citizens, and it is government’s duty to take care of them. Of course, residents are then responsible for maintaining those areas; for instance, people should educate their children to preserve green spaces and control that they do not vandalize fountains or benches. Moreover, it is useful for themselves, as they can play sports, rest or organize some events there. Consequently, as soon residents understand that they do really need those venues to gather and have a great time, they would take much care. However, sometimes tourists or people who do not live in that specific area tend to ruin others’ goods, being totally disrespectful. In those cases, the government should take action and repair those damages. Furthermore, a feasible approach would be to fine vandals. For example, they could increase the presence of policemen in the parks or enhance the presence of camcorders, in order to identify people who do not respect public areas. Doing that, money earned from fines could be reinvested in the makeover to repair vandalized objects or structures. To sum up, I do believe that is everybody’s responsibility to contribute to the preservation of public areas, because it is advantageous both for residents and tourists.
Tourists
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often
claim that specific
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areas
in
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some
cities are untidy and in decay. This issue, then affects
also
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residents’
life quality, as they cannot dispose of public parks and gardens nearby their
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houses
.
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So
, they blame the
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government
due to the lack of maintenance of those spaces.

Public gardens cannot
be incentivized
by private citizens, and it is
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government
’s duty to take care of them.
Of course
,
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residents
are then responsible for maintaining those
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areas
;
for instance
,
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people
should educate their children to preserve green spaces and control that they do not vandalize fountains or benches.
Moreover
, it is useful for themselves, as they can play sports, rest or organize
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some
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events
there.
Consequently
, as
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soon
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residents
understand that they do
really
need those venues to gather and have a great time, they would take much care.

However
,
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sometimes
tourists or
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people
who do not
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live
in that specific
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area
tend to ruin others’
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goods
, being
totally
disrespectful. In those cases, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should take action and repair those damages.
Furthermore
, a feasible approach would be to fine vandals.
For example
, they could increase the presence of policemen in the parks or enhance the presence of camcorders, in order to identify
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who do not respect public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
. Doing that, money earned from fines could
be reinvested
in the makeover to repair vandalized objects or structures.

To sum up, I do believe
that is
everybody’s responsibility to contribute to the preservation of public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is advantageous both for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
residents
and tourists.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some think that resident should be responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others says it is the government’s responsibility. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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