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Some think that buildings should be constructed with functionality in mind, as it is more important than design. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some think that buildings should be constructed with functionality in mind, as it is more important than design. v. 2
Designs of the buildings are generally associated with culture and art prevail in society and this can be seen by examine the different structures built in the world. Ignoring this concept, some people believe that functionality should always be kept in mind while completing a building as the goal of every constructed building is to be used by people for various purposes. I agree with this and explain the reason for it. People who emphasis on the pattern of structure have some valid points. Firstly, buildings reflect the mood of the society and even after many years it tells the story of the time & living trend of the society. Many historical building exhibit itself the unique values and activities of that time. For example, RedFort in Delhi has peculiar design and talks about the stone carving, different shape play round, open theater, in house musical room and have more resemblance with Arab culture. However, there is no doubt that every famous building is known for its usages and functions which provides different facility and luxury to its stakeholder. People use these building for numerous purposes and do not even talk about ecstatic aspects such as shape, color, interiors etc. For instance, Bukingam palace in London is not known for its design but many people come to see the palace and still king and queen of London reside in palace and it also used for purposes such as exhibition, organizing camp for immigrants and musical shows. To conclude, design of building contributes in ecstatic aspects which are key consideration while constructing the building but everyone at the end wants to use for a purpose. Therefore, functionality aspects of the structure are more valuable than design.
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associated with culture and art prevail in society and this can be
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seen
by examine the
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different
structures built in the world. Ignoring this concept,
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some
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people
believe that functionality should always be
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kept
in mind while completing a
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building
as the goal of every constructed
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building
is to be
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used
by
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people
for various
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purposes
. I
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agree
with this and
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explain
the reason for it.

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People
who emphasis on the pattern of structure have
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some
valid points.
Firstly
,
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buildings
reflect the mood of the society and even after
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many
years it
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tells
the story of the time
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&amp
; living trend of the society.
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Many
historical
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building
exhibit itself the unique values and activities of that time.
For example
,
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RedFort
in Delhi has peculiar
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design
and talks about the stone carving,
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different
shape play round, open theater, in
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house
musical room and have more resemblance with Arab culture.

However
, there is no doubt that every
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famous
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building
is known
for its usages and functions which provides
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different
facility and luxury to its stakeholder.
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People
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use
these
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building
for numerous
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purposes
and do not even talk about ecstatic aspects such as shape, color, interiors etc.
For instance
,
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Bukingam
palace in London is not known for its
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design
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but
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many
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people
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come
to
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see
the palace and
still
king and queen of London reside in palace and it
also
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used
for
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purposes
such as exhibition, organizing camp for immigrants and musical
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shows
.

To conclude
,
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design
of
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building
contributes in ecstatic aspects which are key consideration while constructing the
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building
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but
everyone at the
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end
wants to
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use
for a
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purpose
.
Therefore
, functionality aspects of the structure are more valuable than
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design
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some think that buildings should be constructed with functionality in mind, as it is more important than design. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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