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Nowadays many people work part or full time from home Some people say that working from home has many benefits while others disagree Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.2

Nowadays many people work part or full time from home Some people say that working from home has many benefits while others disagree 2
In the modern era, finding a job is not limited to field work, but it extended to electronic work. Whilst some are of the belief that working from home has many positive aspects, others have a diverse view. I am of the opinion that working at a specific organization has its advantages rather than online job from home. In this essay, both prespectives along with my point of view will be demonstrated before we reach a conclusion. On one hand, Internet inventions have an effective role when it comes to online work. In other words, technology has assisted males and females from getting jobs and working from their comfort zone without the need to go outside. Not only does working from home helps to save transportation money but it also saves time; moreover, environmentaly, the completion of houses' duties without going outside, it reduces traffic jam; it minimizes the number of cars on the streets. In addition to that housewives can work and look after their children as well. For instance, in 2017, a survey has been published by The Economist, showed that after the spread of jobs over the Internet, there are an increasing in the number of working women. Despite the idea mentiond-above, it can be assumed that working from home has several drawbacks. To illustrate, working from home is killing activism and replace it by slacktivism. Besides, people who are working from home have less chance for promotion when it comes to career gradient. Furthermore, it has a detrimental effect on interpersonal skills due to the lack of communication with others. For example, according to research by The New York Times, showed that people who work outside at local or governmental jobs have a better communication standards more than others by 65%. Thus, working from home has a positive impact on health and society norms. In conclusion, the power of technology has shifted the balance from the hands of a few to the masses. Therefore, it has helped the current generations to work full-time or part-time from houses and sometimes both; I still believe that it has demerits outnumber merits. It is recommended that individuals who want to increase there income, ought to work a full-time job at offices beside part-time from home to gain both benefits of them.
In the modern era, finding a
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is not limited to field
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work
,
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but
it extended to electronic
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work
. Whilst
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some
are of the belief that
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working
from home has
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many
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positive
aspects, others have a diverse view. I am of the opinion that
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working
at a specific organization has its advantages
rather
than online
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job
from home. In this essay, both
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prespectives
along with my point of view will
be demonstrated
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before
we reach a conclusion.

On one hand, Internet inventions have an effective role when it
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comes
to online
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work
. In
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other
words, technology has assisted males and females from getting
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jobs
and
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working
from their comfort zone without the need to go outside. Not
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only
does
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working
from home
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helps
to save transportation money
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but
it
also
saves time;
moreover
,
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environmentaly
, the completion of
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houses&
#039; duties without going outside, it
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reduces
traffic jam; it minimizes the number of cars on the streets.
In addition
to that housewives can
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work
and look after their children
as well
.
For instance
, in 2017, a survey has
been published
by The Economist,
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showed
that after the spread of
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jobs
over the Internet, there are an increasing in the number of
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working
women.

Despite the
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idea
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mentiond-above
, it can
be assumed
that
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working
from home has several drawbacks. To illustrate,
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working
from home is killing activism and replace it by
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slacktivism
.
Besides
,
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people
who are
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working
from home have less chance for promotion when it
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comes
to career gradient.
Furthermore
, it has a detrimental effect on interpersonal
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skills
due to the lack of communication with others.
For example
, according to research by The New York Times,
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showed
that
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people
who
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work
outside at local or governmental
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jobs
have a better communication standards more than others by 65%.
Thus
,
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working
from home has a
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positive
impact on health and society norms.

In conclusion
, the power of technology has shifted the balance from the hands of a few to the masses.
Therefore
, it has
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helped
the
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current
generations to
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work
full-time or part-time from
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houses
and
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sometimes
both; I
still
believe that it has demerits outnumber merits. It
is recommended
that individuals who want to increase there income, ought to
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work
a full-time
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job
at offices beside part-time from home to gain both benefits of them.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays many people work part or full time from home Some people say that working from home has many benefits while others disagree 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
382 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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