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Some think it is right to give beggars money on the street while others think it is wrong to do it. What is your stance on this topic? Be sure to include specific details and examples in your response. v.2

Some think it is right to give beggars money on the street while others think it is wrong to do it. What is your stance on this topic? Be sure to include specific details and examples in your response. v. 2
Humanitarian actions are what define the hallmark of a person’s general kindness. To give, they say, represents the greatest love of all. We have seen super-wealthy billionaires like the Bill gates, Bezos, and the Buffets donate a significant chunk of their liquidity to charity. That is not to say there are many more unknown people who give to their most next-door neighbors without much fuss. Consequently, I think these actions are of noble motifs, however, I do not think it is advisable to bestow alms to the poor on the street because it encourages laziness and promotes plausible lies. As the saying goes, do not give a man to fish, teach him how to fish. As cliché as that sentence sounds, it is of utmost importance that we delve a bit deeper into its significance. Giving beggars some change here and there on the street is not veritably a way of aiding them. It merely encourages them to keep begging, thereby making them lazy. We might think we are assisting them but in reality, we are suppressing their creative-thinking ability. For instance, a beggar who genuinely has the moral justification to do so may be a good sales representative in the making; for him to ask for alms is to possess good convincing skills. One could tap into this natural people-skill of his by sending him to the appropriate school. As a result, one would have invariably created a way out of economic and intellectual poverty for someone who never thought it possible. This way, one is being of help by eradicating laziness and creating a means of necessary sustenance. Additionally, these days we have many people who impersonate by faking as beggars. How can one differentiate between a fake and a genuine beggar on the roadside? One could be giving generously to a deceitful person while the person truly in need of help gets nothing. For example, on my way back from work last week, I saw an angry mob lynching a beggar; he concealed one of his legs in his trousers by flexing the knee and fastening it to his thigh with a rope. This event left a nasty impression on my mind never to trust any beggar. I believe donating to charitable causes is a more practical way of helping because these bodies possess a more valuable experience in dealing with the needy and one is confident the money is being fictitiously unspent. To put it briefly, helping the needy is a very selfless act to carry out, but I strongly believe learning a trade and donating to people or bodies that can manage these funds efficiently is a better way to render assistance to beggars. This way, you are being of help, but are not encouraging laziness and deceit.
Humanitarian actions are what define the hallmark of a person’s general kindness. To give, they say, represents the greatest
love
of all. We have
seen
super-wealthy billionaires like the
Bill gates
, Bezos, and the Buffets donate a significant chunk of their liquidity to charity.
That is
not to say there are
many
more unknown
people
who
give to their most
next
-door neighbors without much fuss.
Consequently
, I
think
these actions are of noble motifs,
however
, I do not
think
it is advisable to bestow alms to the poor on the street
because
it encourages laziness and promotes plausible lies.

As the saying goes, do not give a
man
to fish, teach him how to fish. As cliché as that sentence sounds, it is of utmost importance that we delve a bit deeper into its significance. Giving
beggars
some
change
here and there on the street is not
veritably
a way of aiding them. It
merely
encourages them to
keep
begging, thereby making them lazy. We might
think
we are assisting them
but
in reality, we are suppressing their creative-thinking ability.
For instance
, a
beggar
who
genuinely
has the moral justification to do
so
may be a
good
sales representative in the making; for him to
ask for
alms is to possess
good
convincing
skills
. One could tap into this natural
people
-
skill
of his by sending him to the appropriate school.
As a result
, one would have
invariably
created a way out of economic and intellectual poverty for someone
who
never
thought
it possible. This way, one is being of
help
by eradicating laziness and creating a means of necessary sustenance.

Additionally
, these days we have
many
people
who
impersonate by faking as
beggars
. How can one differentiate between a fake and a genuine
beggar
on the roadside? One could be giving
generously
to a deceitful person while the person
truly
in need of
help
gets
nothing.
For example
, on my way back from work last week, I
saw
an angry mob lynching a
beggar
; he concealed one of his legs in his trousers by flexing the knee and fastening it to his thigh with a rope. This
event
left
a nasty impression on my mind never to trust any
beggar
. I believe donating to charitable causes is a more practical way of helping
because
these bodies possess a more valuable experience in dealing with the needy and one is confident the money is being
fictitiously
unspent.

To put it
briefly
, helping the needy is a
very
selfless act to carry out,
but
I
strongly
believe learning a trade and donating to
people
or bodies that can manage these funds
efficiently
is a better way to render assistance to
beggars
. This way, you are being of
help
,
but
are not encouraging laziness and deceit.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some think it is right to give beggars money on the street while others think it is wrong to do it. What is your stance on this topic? Be sure to include specific details and examples in your response. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
463 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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