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Some teachers encourage competitions among their students. Other help students learn how to collaborate and study in groups. Which approach do you think is better for learning do you think so? v.1

Some teachers encourage competitions among their students. Other help students learn how to collaborate and study in groups. Which approach do you think is better for learning do you think so? v. 1
To control the growing proportion of uncleanness few steps need to be taken by prohibiting the use of vehicles running on non-renewable fuels and promoting the usage of electronic cars in place of oil engine. This essay agrees that cars with fuel ignition is increasing the global temperature and certain health issues. Firstly, it will discuss how the electric cars can reduce the harm level and secondly, it will discuss how non-renewable sources can be saved. Primarily, in dynamic machinery there is no ammunition of ignition system which can control the pollution graph. Most of the cars available in the market utilise petrol, diesel and other fuel sources, which is a direct source of increase in air infection. However, electrical machinery makes use of electric power supplies, which result in no contaminant. For instance, in the Netherlands most of the four wheelers run on the electric system, due to which Netherlands achieved the tag of country with zero pollution. As a consequence, to fight against the dragon of infectious diseases, utilization of hybrid vehicles should be increased. Furthermore, lowering of biofuels is still the main concern rising drastically. To control the downward trend of the such sources, it has been necessary to promote the usage of electrified cars in place of the combustible engine otherwise, there would be the lack of their presence in the upcoming future. And it can only be done by spreading awareness among the people regarding the issue. For example, it took almost 25 years for Australia to inform their population about the fossil fuel issue, however it worked and now they have become the first country to utilize the non combustion engine. Thus, to save the heating stuff for the future generation, it has been mandatory to minimise the utilization of normal cars. In conclusion, hybrid cars can be used for both the purposes either in managing the pollution rate or storing of non-renewable resources. For this, all of us need to get united and enlightening all about the advantages of electrically driven vehicles.
To control the growing proportion of uncleanness few steps need to
be taken
by prohibiting the
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use
of vehicles running on non-renewable
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fuels
and promoting the usage of electronic
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cars
in place of oil engine. This essay
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agrees
that
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cars
with
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fuel
ignition is increasing the global temperature and certain health issues.
Firstly
, it will discuss how the electric
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cars
can
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reduce
the harm level and
secondly
, it will discuss how non-renewable
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sources
can
be saved
.

Primarily
, in dynamic machinery there is no ammunition of ignition system which can control the pollution graph. Most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
available in the market
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utilise
petrol, diesel and other
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fuel
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sources
, which is a direct
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source
of increase in air infection.
However
, electrical machinery
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makes
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use
of electric power supplies, which result in no contaminant.
For instance
, in the Netherlands most of the four
Possible spelling mistake found.
wheelers
run on the electric system, due to which Netherlands achieved the tag of country with zero pollution. As a consequence, to fight against the dragon of infectious diseases, utilization of hybrid vehicles should
be increased
.

Furthermore
, lowering of biofuels is
still
the main concern rising
drastically
. To control the downward trend of the such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sources
, it has been necessary to promote the usage of electrified
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
in place of the combustible engine
otherwise
, there would be the lack of their presence in the upcoming future. And it can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be done
by spreading awareness among the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
regarding the issue.
For example
, it took almost 25 years for Australia to inform their population about the fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
issue,
however
it worked and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
they have become the
first
country to
Do not mix variants of the same word ('utilize' and 'utilise') within a single text.
utilize
the
It appears that a hyphen is missing.
non combustion
engine.
Thus
, to save the heating stuff for the future generation, it has been mandatory to
Possible spelling mistake. 'minimise' is British English.
minimise
the utilization of normal cars.

In conclusion
, hybrid
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for both the purposes either in managing the pollution rate or storing of non-renewable resources. For this, all of us need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
united and enlightening all about the advantages of
electrically
driven vehicles.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some teachers encourage competitions among their students. Other help students learn how to collaborate and study in groups. Which approach do you think is better for learning do you think so? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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