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“Often we are asked to collaborate in team projects at events, school, and even work. Sometimes we are required to work with a group of people who share our opinions and ideas. However, sometimes we need to work with groups of people who have entirely d v. 2
Working in team is an ubiquitous necessity and reality all over the world and in all fields of works or activities. It is also an special ability common not only in human specie but also in animal species, when they related with each other to obtain advantage or not. I prefer to work with a group with the same points view. I feel this way for the following reasons. Firstly, when a work is done by a team that share opinions less stress is generated. This is because people agree in many aspects of how they should perform their work, therefore, will be a reduction in discussions and misunderstandings. Moreover, a peaceful and enjoyable environment is generated. For example, many companies use the strategy of divide their employees into teams that share close personalities, thoughts and believes to guarantee that more work will be done with a decline of disagreements. Secondly, working with a group who agrees with each other will decline the time wasted looking for an agreement of ideas. In other words, the work will be done quickly since the team have common sense. Although may occur some disparate ideas, because it is expected that different people may present controversial believes sometimes, the group will solve the situation by choosing the best approach as they share the same mission and vision. Finally, the results reached by team will be increased. A focused group of people that share and concentrate their efforts in the same direction will achieve their goals. A group of people who direct their energy in a random way, however, will hardly obtain their expected results. For instance, in a school group of students that are together to create a science project if they since the beginning trace a strategy of what and how to do their project they will certainly obtain a good grade and reach the expected result with the experiment. To sum up, I prefer to work with a team that share my opinions. This is because it is less stressful, we will lose few time discording with others and the results will be increased.
Working in
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is
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an
ubiquitous necessity and reality all over the world and in all fields of works or activities. It is
also
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an
special ability common not
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only
in human specie
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but
also
in animal species, when they related with each
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other
to obtain advantage or not. I prefer to
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work
with a
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group
with the same points view. I feel this way for the following reasons.

Firstly
, when a
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work
is done
by a
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team
that
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share
opinions less
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stress
is generated
. This is
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because
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people
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agree
in
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many
aspects of how they should perform their
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work
,
therefore
, will be a reduction in discussions and misunderstandings.
Moreover
, a peaceful and enjoyable environment
is generated
.
For example
,
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many
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companies
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use
the strategy of divide their employees into
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teams
that
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share
close personalities, thoughts and believes to guarantee that more
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work
will
be done
with a decline of disagreements.

Secondly
, working with a
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group
who
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agrees
with each
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other
will decline the time wasted looking for an agreement of
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ideas
. In
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other
words, the
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work
will
be done
quickly
since the
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team
have common sense. Although may occur
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some
disparate
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ideas
,
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because
it is
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expected
that
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different
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people
may present controversial believes
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sometimes
, the
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group
will solve the situation by choosing the best approach as they
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share
the same mission and vision.

Finally
, the
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results
reached by
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team
will
be increased
. A focused
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group
of
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people
that
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share
and concentrate their efforts in the same direction will achieve their goals. A
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group
of
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people
who direct their energy
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in a random way
,
however
, will hardly obtain their
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expected
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results
.
For instance
, in a school
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group
of students that are together to create a science project if they since the beginning trace a strategy of what and how to do their project they will
certainly
obtain a
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good
grade and reach the
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expected
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result
with the experiment.

To sum up, I prefer to
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work
with a
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team
that
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share
my opinions. This is
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because
it is less stressful, we will lose
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few time
discording with others and the
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results
will
be increased
.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay “Often we are asked to collaborate in team projects at events, school, and even work. Sometimes we are required to work with a group of people who share our opinions and ideas. However, sometimes we need to work with groups of people who have entirely d v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
352 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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