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Some students prefer to live alone or live with their friends when they study abroad. Other students prefer to live with local family when they study aboard. Which way do you prefer and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your response. v.1

Some students prefer to live alone or live with their friends when they study abroad. Other students prefer to live with local family when they study aboard. Which way do you prefer and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your response. v. 1
Saving different kind of genes throughout the human life has been increasing enormously in our day to day life. Some people argue that it’s better to invest funds on the endangered collections while, others think it’s all a waste of their pocket money. Well, I completely agree with investing on those rare categories in our environment ecosystem. People believe that, in order to take care of the endangered breeds it’s costing them a lot in terms of their daily time consumption and their valuable resources. Although they are not net new types to them and they already had great experience with those species and by knowing about them. In a recent report, published by prestigious New York Times magazine about the percentage of drastic change in the various types of categories. Despite their regular activities to look after for their loved genes, it’s stubborn to them. However, irrespective of the facts and statistics, people are fascinated and taking special diligence towards the special the rare types which was about to endanger soon. They think if at all they did not consider to protect them it cost’s them a lot in terms of their future generations and other subsequent centuries till the time human being alive on the world. Even they do not care about to invest and arrange special habitants to those species. For example, now-a-days there is a vast number of treatment centre has been mushroomed with a special equipment also sophisticated and dedicated resources. To conclude, for the upcoming generations, the public and kids will unable to explain regarding those rare collections since this has great impact on human beings since inception. The government should also need to encourage with sufficient investment in public to take care about the remarkable breed.
Saving
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different
kind of genes throughout the human life has been increasing
enormously
in our
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day to day
life.
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Some
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people
argue that it’s better to invest funds on the endangered collections while, others
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think
it’s all a waste of their pocket money. Well, I completely
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agree
with investing on those rare categories in our environment ecosystem.

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People
believe that, in order to take care of the endangered breeds it’s costing them a lot in terms of their daily time consumption and their valuable resources. Although they are not net new types to
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them and
they already had great experience with those species and by knowing about them. In a recent report, published by prestigious New York Times magazine about the percentage of drastic
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change
in the various types of categories. Despite their regular activities to look after for their
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loved
genes, it’s stubborn to them.

However
, irrespective of the facts and statistics,
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people
are fascinated
and taking
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special
diligence towards the
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special
the rare types which was about to endanger
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soon
. They
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think
if at all they did not
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consider to protect
them it
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cost’s
them a lot in terms of their future generations and other subsequent centuries till the time human being alive on the world. Even they do not care about to invest and arrange
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special
habitants to those species.
For example
,
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now
-a-days there is a vast number of treatment
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centre
has
been mushroomed
with a
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special
equipment
also
sophisticated and dedicated resources.

To conclude
, for the upcoming generations, the public and kids will unable to
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explain
regarding those rare collections since this has great impact on human beings since inception. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should
also
need to encourage with sufficient investment in public to take care about the remarkable breed.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some students prefer to live alone or live with their friends when they study abroad. Other students prefer to live with local family when they study aboard. Which way do you prefer and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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