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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study aboard. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? v.5

In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study aboard. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? v. 5
We now live in an age when many of us have a chance to study in another country to get a university qualification. It is different from many years ago that students just stayed in their province and went to college, so let us consider what strengths and weaknesses studying aboard includes. Generally speaking, a student will benefit from living aboard and studying there. Firstly, every country has its diverse traditions and customs, so it is good for us to discover. For example, Chileans have a surprisingly unique New Year celebrating way is spending New Year's Eve with the dead. Therefore, some kinds of traditional celebrations like that probably make us curious and interested in. Secondly, we will have a chance to study with effective and modern studying methods that help us to learn easily such as theories combine practicing, going on an excursion, studying with smart televisions and robots, being encouraged to organize a community project, etc so we will become more knowledgeable to develop our countries when we return. Notwithstanding, getting foreign schooling also has some drawbacks. Culture shock is one of them. We cannot be accustomed to it right away; it may take us two weeks or one month to adjust, especially for some of who have been familiar to our country's lifestyles, it can take us years. For instance, Asians have difficulty being used to the greet methods are kissing cheeks and hugging each other when they study in Western countries. Or some left-handed people feel uncomfortable in the UAE because using left hand when they are eating is considered gross. Otherwise, if we have a habit of sitting in the back of a cab, then it is rude in Australia. Without any doubt, not only does the trend of overseas study have the positive aspect but also the downside. We can explore the culture and experience studying facilities. Nevertheless, some cultural styles prevent us from managing to modify our lives.
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aboard includes.

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speaking, a student will benefit from living aboard and
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studying
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, every
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country
has its diverse traditions and customs,
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so
it is
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good
for us to discover.
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, Chileans have a
surprisingly
unique New Year celebrating way is spending New Year's Eve with the dead.
Therefore
,
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some
kinds of traditional celebrations like that
probably
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make
us curious and interested in.
Secondly
, we will have a chance to
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study
with effective and modern
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studying
methods that
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help
us to learn
easily
such as theories combine practicing, going on an excursion,
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studying
with smart televisions and robots,
being encouraged
to organize a community project, etc
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so
we will become more knowledgeable to develop our
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countries
when we return.

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also
has
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some
drawbacks. Culture shock is one of them. We cannot
be accustomed
to it right away; it may take us two weeks or one month to adjust,
especially
for
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some
of
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have been familiar to our country's lifestyles, it can take us years.
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, Asians have difficulty being
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used
to the greet methods are kissing cheeks and hugging each other when they
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study
in Western
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countries
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some
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left
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using
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left
hand when they are eating
is considered
gross.
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, if we have a habit of sitting in the back of a cab, then it is rude in Australia.

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does the trend of overseas
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study
have the
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positive
aspect
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the downside. We can explore the culture and experience
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studying
facilities.
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,
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some
cultural styles
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prevent
us from managing to modify our
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lives
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IELTS essay In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study aboard. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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