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Some students like classes where teachers lecture in the class. others prefer classes where the students do some of the talking. what do you prefer. give reasons and examples v.1

Some students like classes where teachers lecture in the class. others prefer classes where the students do some of the talking. what do you prefer. give reasons and examples v. 1
In recent years, the change in cash spending to buy people's needs has occurred dramatically. As a result, it always will be a controversial topic whether it is a bad or positive trend relating to the shopping habit which has become a routine task and even a hobby. This essay, as my point of view, leads to, try to come up with several considerations as I believe that going shopping can have a positive and negative impacts too. In this essay, it will be discussed the privative and perfect point of view going to shopping. Shopping, that contradicts the topic regards, is a nightmare because the impacts which are dire also inevitable. Consumerism, in some ways, contributes bad things to the society as well as the civilisations. People who overcapitalize their money can spend their revenues on nothing and as a result, they suffer in managing their funding and try to borrow a big amount of money for just their basic needs. Psychologists argue that addiction to shopping which creates consumerism behaviour can lead to several criminal dire effects such as robbery and stealing. However, without shopping and its relating things governments will face the problem in controlling the economy. Without increasing in indicators of shopping, there will be severe implications which the economist called unemployment. The improvement of spending money indicates that people in the country are wealthy and also projects the prosperity of the nation which influences the corporations to produce products in high quantity as well as high quality. Throughout this trend, the employers will try to give chances for people to get their job in the corporations. As consequences, spending on buying products, even it is a hobby or not, with larger portions helps economy matters indirectly. To sum up, having considered the discussion above, I believe it will always create both positive and negative impacts, but shopping habit can be useful, for instance if the shoppers expend their money wisely. I recommend that every government should enlarge the possibilities of doing shopping
In recent years, the
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change
in cash spending to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
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people
's needs has occurred
dramatically
.
As a result
, it always will be a controversial topic whether it is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
or
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positive
trend relating to the
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shopping
habit which has become a routine task and even a hobby. This essay, as my point of view, leads to, try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
up with several considerations as I believe that going
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
can have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
and
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negative
impacts too. In this essay, it will
be discussed
the
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privative
and perfect point of view going to shopping.

Shopping, that contradicts the topic regards, is a nightmare
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because
the impacts which are dire
also
inevitable. Consumerism, in
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some
ways, contributes
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bad
things to the society
as well
as the
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civilisations
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
who overcapitalize their
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money
can spend their revenues on nothing and
as a result
, they suffer in managing their funding and try to borrow a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
their basic needs. Psychologists argue that addiction to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
which creates consumerism
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behaviour
can lead to several criminal dire effects such as robbery and stealing.

However
, without
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
and its relating things
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
will face the problem in controlling the economy. Without increasing in indicators of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
, there will be severe implications which the economist called unemployment. The improvement of spending
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
indicates that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in the country are wealthy and
also
projects the prosperity of the nation which influences the corporations to produce products in high quantity
as well
as high quality. Throughout this trend, the employers will try to give chances for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
their job in the corporations. As consequences, spending on buying products, even it is a hobby or not, with larger portions
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
economy matters
indirectly
.

To sum up, having considered the discussion above, I believe it will always create both
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impacts,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
habit can be useful,
for instance
if the shoppers expend their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
wisely
. I recommend that every
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should enlarge the possibilities of doing
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
shopping
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some students like classes where teachers lecture in the class. others prefer classes where the students do some of the talking. what do you prefer. give reasons and examples v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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