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Some people think that giving students time during a class to discuss ideas with each other is a good way to help students learn; others think giving students time for discussion is ineffective or a waste of time. Which idea do you agree. v.1

Some people think that giving students time during a class to discuss ideas with each other is a good way to help students learn; others think giving students time for discussion is ineffective or a waste of time. Which idea do you agree. v. 1
It's not a denying fact that young one nowadays struggle a lot in studying mathematics or philosophy. Some people accord that courses like these are difficult to study. Therefore, it should be made non compulsory for students. This essay will discuss reasons behind this thought and provide evidence why it should not be an option to choose. To embark on, making educational curriculum according to the likes of students may be beneficial but not good for the long run. Whether they don't want to become engineers or do their own business, but still in the future, they must know the basic of it. For instance, a study shows that the most of the reason for failure of the person is people with low mathematical skills fails to manage even the simplest calculations also. Therefore, learning a bit of it should be compulsory in eventual time. Also teaching complex in childhood is a vital so that they don't feel any pressure when they will deal more complex subject like economics in forthcoming. Thus, without providing an option to choose, it should be made compulsory in the curriculum. On the other side, However, it may sometimes create pressure on the adolescences. For example, pupils who get a choice to choose that get better marks in their own subject as they don't try hard to learn that particular subjects. Thus, making it elective will reduce the pressure on the child and also they will enjoy learning it. In a nutshell, Although making maths and philosophy an option for younger will make them excel in another subject, but learning basic skills is must for their prospective work or even just managing their own expenses it should not be an elective to choose.
It's not a denying fact that young one nowadays struggle a lot in studying mathematics or philosophy.
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accord that courses like these are difficult to study.
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non compulsory
for students. This essay will discuss reasons behind this
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thought
and provide evidence why it should not be an option to choose.

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but
not
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good
for the long run. Whether they don't want to become engineers or do their
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own
business,
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but
still
in the future, they
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must
know the basic of it.
For instance
, a study
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shows
that the most of the reason for failure of the person is
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people
with low mathematical
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skills
fails to manage even the simplest calculations
also
.
Therefore
, learning a bit of it should be compulsory in eventual time.
Also
teaching complex in childhood is a vital
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so
that they don't feel any pressure when they will deal more complex
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subject
like economics in forthcoming.
Thus
, without providing an option to choose, it should
be made
compulsory in the curriculum.

On the other side,
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, it may
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create pressure on the adolescences.
For example
, pupils who
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get
a choice to choose that
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get
better marks in their
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own
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subject
as they don't try
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hard
to learn that particular
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subjects
.
Thus
, making it elective will
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reduce
the pressure on the child and
also
they will enjoy learning it.

In a nutshell, Although making
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maths
and philosophy an option for younger will
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make
them excel in another
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subject
,
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but
learning basic
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skills
is
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must
for their prospective work or even
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just
managing their
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own
expenses it should not be an elective to choose.
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IELTS essay Some people think that giving students time during a class to discuss ideas with each other is a good way to help students learn; others think giving students time for discussion is ineffective or a waste of time. Which idea do you agree. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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