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Some students choose to study in another country for a time during high school or university. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad? v.1

Some students choose to study in another country for a time during high school or university. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad? v. 1
There is a general concensus that in comtemporary society, the number of students diciding to study abroad for a time during high school or university has an upward trend. Although the benefits that it has brought are undeniable, its drawbacks should not be ignored. On the one hand, studying in another country can help students have a brighter future and an independent life. It is clearly seen that people who study abroad will have more chance to get a well- paid job because of international certificates. They are trained to become global citizens, they have essential skills including language, I. T, . . . to work at any countries. Moreover, when students choosing to study at high schools or tertiary institutions in another country, they will live under new environment, which gets them out of their comfort vibe and and become more independent. On the other hand, studying abroad has two major downsides that students can experience. Firstly, some students will struggle to finance, because standard of living in developed countries is higher than that of their country. Therefore, many students have to have part- time jobs to help their parents to pay fee for high- cost education. Secondly, homesichness is the issue that exchange students face. Despite living in more attractive environment, they still miss their family and their country. A recent research shows that ninety- two percent of international students feel homesick when studying abroad. In conclusion, studying abroad for a time during high school or third- level school helps students to widen their knowledge and have a better life, but they have to experience some difficulties such as finance or homesichkness. However, I strongly believe that the advantages this trend has brought outweigh the disadvantages.
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abroad
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school
or university has an upward trend. Although the benefits that it has brought are undeniable, its drawbacks should not be
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studying
in another
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country
can
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help
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students
have a brighter future and an independent life. It is
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people
who study
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abroad
will have more chance to
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get
a well- paid job
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because
of international certificates. They
are trained
to become global citizens, they have essential
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skills
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students
choosing to study at
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high
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schools
or tertiary institutions in another
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country
, they will
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gets
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become more independent.

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,
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studying
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abroad
has two major downsides that
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students
can experience.
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some
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will struggle to finance,
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countries
is higher than that of their
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country
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many
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students
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have to
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help
their parents to pay fee for
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high-
cost education.
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is the issue that exchange
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students
face. Despite living in more attractive environment, they
still
miss their family and their
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country
. A recent research
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shows
that ninety- two percent of international
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students
feel homesick when
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studying
abroad.

In conclusion
,
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studying
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abroad
for a time during
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high
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school
or third- level
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school
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helps
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students
to widen their knowledge and have a better life,
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experience
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However
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strongly
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IELTS essay Some students choose to study in another country for a time during high school or university. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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