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Nowadays many students choose to study abroad at university level Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad and give your opinion about whether it is a good idea v.1

Nowadays many students choose to study abroad at university level Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad and give your opinion about whether it is a good idea v. 1
Organising International sporting events such as The Olympic games is exhilarating activity. Although, some people believe that The Olympic Games is advantageous for the country, other opine that it is a wasteful activity. This essay will discuss both views and support the argument that such international games must be planned because of its positive impact, followed by a reasoned conclusion. It is clear that by planing intercontinental games helps to attract several foreign tourists which result in a foreign currency inflow This is to say, when such multi-national games are organised by the host country invites many foreign tourists from all over the world which in turn brings in foreign currency that helps to boost the economy of the country. To elucidate, a recent poll done by the Indian Government found that a country's economy is benefiting the most by organising international sports events. As a result, it helps in the growth and development of the country. However, certain people believe that the organisation of multi-national events leads to the wastage of financial resources of the country. In other words, a nation will have to spend huge sum of funds in the construction and development of infrastructures for these events. That is money allocated in constructing roads, hotels for foreign tourists, construction of the stadium and so on. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by the government found that more than millions of funds are wasted in organising international events. As a consequence, it puts the company under financial burden and distress. To conclude, while some people believe that international events are beneficial, others opine that it is a waste of money. However, In my opinion, I vehemently agree that the organisation of multi-national events helps in the development and expansion of a country by bringing in more foreign funds.
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Organising
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International
sporting
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events
such as The Olympic
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games
is exhilarating activity. Although,
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some
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people
believe that The Olympic
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Games
is advantageous for the
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country
, other opine that it is a wasteful activity. This essay will discuss both views and support the argument that such
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international
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games
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must
be planned
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because
of its
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positive
impact, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

It is
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clear
that by planing intercontinental
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games
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helps
to attract several
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foreign
tourists which result in a
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foreign
currency inflow This is to say, when such multi-national
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games
are
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organised
by the host
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country
invites
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many
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foreign
tourists from all over the world which in turn brings in
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foreign
currency that
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helps
to boost the economy of the
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country
. To elucidate, a recent poll done by the Indian
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Government
found that a country's economy is benefiting the most by
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organising
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international
sports
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events
.
As a result
, it
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helps
in the growth and development of the country.

However
, certain
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people
believe that the
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organisation
of multi-national
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events
leads to the wastage of financial resources of the
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country
.
In other words
, a nation will
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have to
spend huge sum of funds in the construction and development of infrastructures for these
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events
.
That is
money allocated in constructing roads, hotels for
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foreign
tourists, construction of the stadium and
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so
on. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by the
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government
found that more than millions of funds
are wasted
in
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organising
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international
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events
. As a consequence, it puts the
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company
under financial burden and distress.

To conclude
, while
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some
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people
believe that
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international
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events
are beneficial, others opine that it is a waste of money.
However
, In my opinion, I
vehemently
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agree
that the
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organisation
of multi-national
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events
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helps
in the development and expansion of a
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country
by bringing in more
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foreign
funds.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays many students choose to study abroad at university level Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad and give your opinion about whether it is a good idea v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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