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Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it's wiser to marry for money. v.3

Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it's wiser to marry for money. v. 3
Marriage is one of the most important ceremonies in human’s life. Many people marry for love while many others marry for money. There are valid arguments for both types of wedding. In this essay, I will discuss both views but in my opinion, people should not consider money as a vital component of the marriage. People who oppose wedding for love say that marriages cannot be successful if the couple has a scarcity of money. Money takes the priority and the love flies in the air if people cannot live a comfortable life. Opponents of this view also argue that love is just an emotion and can be developed even after marriage. Having a splendid vacation, enjoying luxurious holidays together are memorable and people fell in love with each other. In old days parents used to choose the life partner for their kids considering their intellect and various factors where money was one of the major deciding factors and even that time marriages were successful. We seldom hear cases of divorce. Proponents of love marriages comment that even in difficult situations of the life if spouses understand each other they can mutually work in the adverse condition and resolve the issues. Secondly, the financial condition of people may vary in different stages of life. These marriages will not get affected by the change in economic condition. Finally, love marriages are highly successful as couples do understand each other and they know their compatibility very well before marriage. To conclude, getting wed for money or like is an individual decision and may be governed by culture and tradition as well. In my opinion, for successful and happy married life affection is an important factor and people should marry for the love, not money.
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is one of the most
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ceremonies in human’s
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life
.
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people
marry for
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love
while
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many
others marry for
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money
. There are valid arguments for both types of wedding. In this essay, I will discuss both views
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but
in my opinion,
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people
should not consider
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money
as a vital component of the marriage.

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who oppose wedding for
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love
say that
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marriages
cannot be
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successful
if the couple has a scarcity of
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money
.
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Money
takes the priority and the
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love
flies in the air if
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people
cannot
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a comfortable
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life
. Opponents of this view
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love
is
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an emotion and can
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even after
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marriage
. Having a splendid vacation, enjoying luxurious holidays together are memorable and
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people
fell in
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love
with each
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other
. In
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old
days parents
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used
to choose the
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life
partner for their kids considering their intellect and various factors where
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money
was one of the major deciding factors and even that time
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marriages
were
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successful
. We seldom hear cases of divorce.

Proponents of
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love
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marriages
comment that even in difficult situations of the
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life
if spouses understand each
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other
they can
mutually
work in the adverse condition and resolve the issues.
Secondly
, the financial condition of
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people
may vary in
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different
stages of
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life
. These
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marriages
will not
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get
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affected
by the
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change
in economic condition.
Finally
,
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love
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marriages
are
highly
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successful
as couples do understand each
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other and
they know their compatibility
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very
well
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before
marriage.

To conclude
, getting wed for
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money
or like is an individual decision and may
be governed
by culture and tradition
as well
. In my opinion, for
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successful
and happy married
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life
affection is an
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important
factor and
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people
should marry for the
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love
, not
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money
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it's wiser to marry for money. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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