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Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion. v.1

Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. v. 1
Nowadays, money is one of the most significant materials in our lives. To many people, it is appropriate to marry for money rather than love. However, I believe that both love and money should be combined in any marriage. Certainly, money plays an important part in our lives. It is hard for any persons to accept a partner who does not have money or at least a job to take care of their future family. Hence, it is said, “marry for money” is right in some extent. However, love should be the root of any marriage. Firstly, it is because love is such a strong bond between two persons who have their own lives, and become one. So, they can share each other’s sadness, happiness to overcome any difficulties in their daily lives. Moreover, love makes people grow up because they do not only have responsibility to themselves, but also to their partners as well. That is why marrying for love is always encouraged. In my opinion, I think that love and money are both necessary. A marriage relying on money would rapidly disintegrate when unfortunately the money ran out. In contrary, a marriage relying on love would sometimes come to end when they could not earn money to carry out family duties such as paying bills, buying food, etc. Therefore, love and money should stand together in marriage even though their contribution could be unbalanced. As we have seen, marriage without either money or love would come to an unhappy end. So I believe that they both make their own contribution to a merry family.
Nowadays,
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money
is one of the most significant materials in our
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lives
. To
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, it is appropriate to marry for
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money
rather
than
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love
.
However
, I believe that both
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love
and
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money
should
be combined
in any marriage.

Certainly
,
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money
plays an
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important
part in our
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lives
. It is
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hard
for any persons to accept a partner who does not have
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money
or at least a job to take care of their future family.
Hence
, it
is said
, “marry for
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money”
is right in
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some
extent.

However
,
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love
should be the root of any
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marriage
.
Firstly
, it is
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because
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love
is such a strong bond between two persons who have their
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own
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lives
, and become one.
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So
, they can share each other’s sadness, happiness to overcome any difficulties in their daily
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lives
.
Moreover
,
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love
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makes
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people
grow up
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because
they do not
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only
have responsibility to themselves,
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but
also
to their partners
as well
.
That is
why marrying for
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love
is always encouraged.

In my opinion, I
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think
that
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love
and
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are both necessary. A
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marriage
relying on
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money
would
rapidly
disintegrate when unfortunately the
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money
ran out. In contrary, a
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marriage
relying on
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love
would
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sometimes
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come
to
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end
when they could not earn
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money
to carry out family duties such as paying bills, buying food, etc.
Therefore
,
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love
and
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money
should stand together in
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marriage
even though
their contribution could
be unbalanced
.

As we have
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seen
,
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marriage
without either
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money
or
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love
would
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come
to an unhappy
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end
.
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So
I believe that they both
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make
their
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contribution to a merry family.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
266 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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