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ome say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. v.1

ome say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. v. 1
Nowadays, money is one of the most significant elements in our lives. So, for many people, it may seem appropriate to marry for money rather than love. Certainly, money plays an important part in our lives. It is challenging for any persons to accept a partner who does not have money, or at least a job to take care of their future family. Hence, the expression, “marry for money” seems appropriate, in some extent, at least. However, I believe that marriage should involve a combination of both love and money. Clearly, love should be the foundation of any marriage. This is because firstly, love is such a strong bond between two persons, who have their own lives, yet become one. They can share each other’s sadness or happiness in order to overcome any difficulties in daily lives. Moreover, love fosters maturity because each member of a couple no longer has responsibility only for themselves, but also for their partner. These are just two, key reasons why marrying for love should always be encouraged. In my opinion, love and money are equally necessary. A marriage relying solely on money might rapidly disintegrate in the unfortunate event of the money running out. Similarly, a marriage relying on love alone might sometimes come to an end if the couple could not earn enough money to manage their family’s obligations such as paying bills, or buying food. Therefore, love and money should stand together in marriage, even though their contribution might often be somewhat unequal. To summarise, marriage without either money or love could come to an unfortunate end. For that reason, I would claim that they both make their own, vital contribution to the creation of a happy family.
Nowadays,
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is one of the most significant elements in our
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, it may seem appropriate to marry for
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rather
than
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love
.
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,
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money
plays an
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important
part in our
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lives
. It is challenging for any persons to accept a partner who does not have
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money
, or at least a job to take care of their future family.
Hence
, the expression, “marry for
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money”
seems appropriate, in
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some
extent, at least.
However
, I believe that
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marriage
should involve a combination of both
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love
and money.

Clearly
,
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love
should be the foundation of any
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marriage
. This is
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because
firstly
,
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love
is such a strong bond between two persons, who have their
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own
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lives
,
yet
become one. They can share each other’s sadness or happiness in order to overcome any difficulties in daily
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lives
.
Moreover
,
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love
fosters maturity
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because
each member of a couple no longer has responsibility
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only
for themselves,
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also
for their partner. These are
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two, key reasons why marrying for
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love
should always
be encouraged
.

In my opinion,
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love
and
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money
are
equally
necessary. A
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relying
solely
on
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might
rapidly
disintegrate in the unfortunate
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event
of the
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money
running out.
Similarly
, a
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marriage
relying on
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love
alone might
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sometimes
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come
to an
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end
if the couple could not earn
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enough
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money
to manage their family’s obligations such as paying bills, or buying food.
Therefore
,
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love
and
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money
should stand together in
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marriage
,
even though
their contribution might
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often
be somewhat unequal.

To
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summarise
,
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marriage
without either
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or
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love
could
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come
to an unfortunate
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end
. For that reason, I would claim that they both
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make
their
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, vital contribution to the creation of a happy family.
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31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay ome say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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