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The best way to solve the environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The best way to solve the environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel. v. 1
Environmental protection is one of the most important challenges that we are facing. Some people state that the most effective way to tackle environmental issues is to rise the fuel cost. To some extent, I believe this solution could bring good results but definitely there are much better methods. It is obvious that the growth of fuel price is an ieal solution for solving problems of the environment. As the cost of fuel is higher, people might use them more efficiently, more economized and the natural resources exploitation will also be minimized which reduce the problem of waste disposal. Moreover, citizens will take the public transportation like bus, train or ride bicycles instead of using their own private cars and motorbikes so that we could reduce quite a hugh amount of toxic emissions everyday. However, there are superior ways to protect the environment that we should consider. The first solution is to plant more trees and flowers which will help to beautify the cityscape as well as improve the air quality. The second solution is have stricter punishment for people who have been accused for deteriorating the environment. For instance, they should be required to pay a huge fine or receive a prison sentence. Additionally, throw-away products like plastic bags, soda can ditrimentally impact our living surroundings so that we should end up using them and change to eco-friendly alternatives. In conclusion, protecting environment is a challenge that needs the contribution of every individual, organization in the world as well as the combination of different solutions. We should deal with the pollution problems bit by bit, day by day so that we can reach the balance of the environment.
Environmental protection is one of the most
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challenges that we are facing.
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Some
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people
state that the most effective way to tackle environmental issues is to rise the fuel cost. To
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some
extent, I believe this
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solution
could bring
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good
results
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but
definitely there are much better methods.

It is obvious that the growth of fuel price is an
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ieal
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solution
for solving problems of the
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environment
. As the cost of fuel is higher,
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people
might
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use
them more
efficiently
, more economized and the natural resources exploitation will
also
be minimized
which
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reduce
the problem of waste disposal.
Moreover
, citizens will take the public transportation like bus, train or ride bicycles
instead
of using their
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own
private cars and motorbikes
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so
that we could
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reduce
quite a
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hugh
amount of toxic emissions
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everyday
.

However
, there are superior ways to protect the
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environment
that we should consider. The
first
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solution
is to plant more trees and flowers which will
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help
to beautify the cityscape
as well
as
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improve
the air quality. The second
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solution
is
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have
stricter punishment for
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people
who have been
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accused for
deteriorating the
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environment
.
For instance
, they should
be required
to pay a huge fine or receive a prison sentence.
Additionally
, throw-away products like plastic bags, soda can
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ditrimentally
impact our living surroundings
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so
that we should
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end
up using them and
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change
to eco-friendly alternatives.

In conclusion
, protecting
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environment
is a challenge that needs the contribution of every individual, organization in the world
as well
as the combination of
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different
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solutions
. We should deal with the pollution problems bit by bit, day by day
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so
that we can reach the balance of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay The best way to solve the environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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