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Some say that the internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together To what extent do to you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another v.2

Some say that the internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together 2
In the past people normally write letters to friends who live in a remote place, which is expensive and time-consuming. With the advant of Internet, the world appears smaller than before because Internet makes communication easier. I utterly agree that the Internet provides a cheap and time saving means for people to communicate with each other. First of all, Internet charges less than other means of communication. A call or message costs consumers merely a few cents; whereas, a letter normally requires several dollars for envelop and stamp. Communication via Internet is so costless that a majority of people who have effortless access to it mainly use phone calls, short messages and e-mails to communicate with others. This is not the only advantage of utlizing Internet for communication. Besides, another advantage of communication via Internet is time saving. A phone call can reach the contact instantly. If the contact is not available at the monent, a short message notifies him at the earliest convenience. In addition, e-mail is becoming a formal way to contact people, replacing the custom of sending a letter because of its advantage of time saving. Generally, a letter takes around one week to reach the receiver; however, an e-mail arrives at the receiver' s mailbox instantly after a click of send button. Thus, Internet makes communication with other people easier the before. To summarize, the advantages of cheap prize and time saving make Internet an easier way to communicate. People nowadays rely on Internet to communicate in almost every occasion.
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advant
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before
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because
Internet
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makes
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communication
easier. I
utterly
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agree
that the Internet provides a
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cheap
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time
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saving
means for
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people
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communicate
with each other.

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, Internet charges less than other means of
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communication
. A call or message costs consumers
merely
a few cents; whereas, a
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letter
normally
requires several dollars for envelop and stamp.
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Communication
via Internet is
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so
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costless
that a majority of
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people
who have effortless access to it
mainly
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use
phone calls, short messages and e-mails to
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communicate
with others. This is not the
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only
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advantage
of
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utlizing
Internet for communication.

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, another
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advantage
of
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communication
via Internet is
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time
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saving
. A phone call can reach the contact
instantly
. If the contact is not available at the
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monent
, a short message notifies him at the earliest convenience.
In addition
, e-mail is becoming a formal way to contact
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people
, replacing the custom of sending a
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letter
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because
of its
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advantage
of
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time
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saving
.
Generally
, a
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letter
takes around one week to reach the receiver;
however
, an e-mail arrives at the
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receiver&
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instantly
after a click of
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send
button.
Thus
, Internet
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makes
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communication
with other
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people
easier the
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before
.

To summarize
, the
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advantages
of
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cheap
prize and
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time
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saving
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make
Internet an easier way to
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communicate
.
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People
nowadays rely on Internet to
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communicate
in almost every occasion.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some say that the internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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