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Some say that rich countries should help poor countries with food and education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience. v.3

Some say that rich countries should help poor countries with food and education. v. 3
In the recent centuries, it has been an obvious gap among the countries all over the world due to technological advancement. Therefore, I agree that it is important for rich countries to assist poor ones in education and supply them with needed food. The reason why some countries are richer than others is the advanced technology which makes these countries have huge industries. On the other hand, the poor countries lose the scientific and research principles which lead to progress. For example, one of the African poor countries is Somalia, where you hardly find life essentials, besides, there is no education at all, while other countries are very advanced and have not only all forms of life requirement, but also entertainment such as The United States. I believe that if this rich part of the world helps the poor part, all of world problems will be solved immediately. Moreover, enabled countries can improve the poor countries' status by two methods. Firstly, they can provide them with fundamental crops such as rice and corn. Secondly, they can help improving the education by establishing schools in different areas in the needed countries, and this could be a kind of increasing the investment benefits. Thirdly, countries can encourage young people from poor countries to pursue their education abroad and fund them. For instant, Turkish government gives full funded scholarships for Syrians who were harmed in the war. Finally, At the prospective of the world peace, all these forms of assistant can help achieving the patriotic relationships among countries and relieving tensions. In conclusion, it should be struggles to achieve worldwide justice through helping poor countries. Although it is difficult to regularly provide them with food and education, some trials will inspire other countries to participate and may foster competitions to assist.
In the recent centuries, it has been an obvious gap among the
countries
all over the
world
due to technological advancement.
Therefore
, I
agree
that it is
important
for rich
countries
to assist
poor
ones in
education
and supply them with needed food.

The reason why
some
countries
are richer than others is the advanced technology which
makes
these
countries
have huge industries. On the
other
hand, the
poor
countries
lose the scientific and research principles which lead to progress.
For example
, one of the African
poor
countries
is Somalia, where you hardly find life essentials,
besides
, there is no
education
at all, while
other
countries
are
very
advanced and have not
only
all forms of life requirement,
but
also
entertainment such as The United States. I believe that if this rich part of the
world
helps
the
poor
part, all of
world
problems will
be solved
immediately.

Moreover
, enabled
countries
can
improve
the
poor
countries' status by two methods.
Firstly
, they can provide them with fundamental crops such as rice and corn.
Secondly
, they can
help
improving
the
education
by establishing schools in
different
areas in the needed
countries
, and this could be a kind of increasing the investment benefits.
Thirdly
,
countries
can encourage young
people
from
poor
countries
to

pursue
their
education
abroad and fund them. For instant, Turkish
government
gives full funded scholarships for Syrians who
were harmed
in the war.
Finally
, At the prospective of the
world
peace, all these forms of assistant can
help
achieving
the patriotic relationships among
countries
and relieving tensions.

In conclusion
, it should be struggles to achieve worldwide justice through helping
poor
countries
. Although it is difficult to
regularly
provide them with food and
education
,
some
trials will inspire
other
countries
to participate and may foster competitions to assist.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some say that rich countries should help poor countries with food and education. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
298 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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