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Some say that news has no connection with most people’s lives and it is a waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some say that news has no connection with most people’s lives and it is a waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. v. 1
With the development of technology, there are many people condemn that the news has no relation with our life and causes time loss when reading them. Personally judging, a sharp disagreement is the point of view because almost the news depends on the actual facts in different events, which related to the reader’ s life, while it is not a waste of time to read them. Firstly, news channels is a descriptive piece of information about real-life events, so it must have a connection with most the life of people. In detail, news articles often focus on the data and what is happening in that area to report to viewers and watchers, who are being connected with the news can have a great opportunity to broaden the horizons in various things in their lives. As a result, news has a significant level of connection with resident’s lives due to settling of many issues which are often indicated in newspapers or programs on TV. Secondly, the news articles only require a minimal amount of hour, while people often spent more time on different kinds of media. In detail, because of basing on reality at a specific moment, so most of the news has been summarized the main content to shorter and easier for readers to understand, while still enough information. Instead of using valuable day for social networks in a day, reading newspapers and watching television news programs just consume a similar period of the user. Consequently, reading or watching the news is not hour-consuming but beneficially concise. In conclusion, accepting that news sometimes annoys us a lot, but I totally believe that reading them will bring many benefits to humans and it is not a waste of day to read them.
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people
condemn that the
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news
has no relation with our life and causes time loss when
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reading
them.
Personally
judging, a sharp disagreement is the point of view
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because
almost the
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news
depends on the actual facts in
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different
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events
, which related to the reader’ s life, while it is not a waste of time to read them.

Firstly
,
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news
channels is a descriptive piece of information about real-life
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events
,
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so
it
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must
have a connection with most the life of
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people
. In detail,
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news
articles
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often
focus on the data and what is happening in that area to report to viewers and watchers, who are
being connected
with the
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news
can have a great opportunity to broaden the horizons in various things in their
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lives
.
As a result
,
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news
has a significant level of connection with resident’s
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lives
due to settling of
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many
issues which are
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often
indicated in newspapers or programs on TV.

Secondly
, the
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news
articles
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only
require a minimal amount of hour, while
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people
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often
spent more time on
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different
kinds of media. In detail,
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because
of basing on reality at a specific moment,
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so
most of the
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news
has
been summarized
the main content to shorter and easier for readers to understand, while
still
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enough
information.
Instead
of using valuable day for social networks in a day,
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reading
newspapers and watching television
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news
programs
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just
consume a similar period of the user.
Consequently
,
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reading
or watching the
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news
is not hour-consuming
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but
beneficially
concise.

In conclusion
, accepting that
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news
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sometimes
annoys us a lot,
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but
I
totally
believe that
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reading
them will bring
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many
benefits to humans and it is not a waste of day to read them.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some say that news has no connection with most people’s lives and it is a waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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