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Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so it is a waste of time to read the news in newspapers and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words. v.1

Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so it is a waste of time to read the news in newspapers and watch television news programs. v. 1
Today, technology is developing rapidly and so are we and so are mediums of information. Nowadays, if any, things happen in any part of the world, the news reaches us. The question arises here whether the news we receive is reliable or not? Because of this many people think the news has no evident connection with people life so reading news from a newspaper or watching it on television is a waste of time. Watching or reading news has its own pros and cons in my opinion. In todays world we need to stay updated all the time. News plays an important role in keeping us posted about the day to day events. Watching or reading news can provide around the globe information and it is the biggest exposure one can get. Nevertheless, This can only be possible when information is coming from a trusted source. As the number of sources of information grows, sources of fake information also grows and no information is way better than fake information. Due to the rise of fake information people are now not interested in knowing the news because it has nothing to do with people's life. In conclusion, news is extremely important part of our lives and we need to follow the news, but the news needs to come from a reliable source a source which is authentic in nature. For that government and news channels has to take responsibility to show authentic and genuine news, otherwise serious action will be taken against them.
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are we and
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are mediums of
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information
. Nowadays, if any, things happen in any part of the world, the
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news
reaches us. The question arises here whether the
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news
we receive is reliable or not?
Because of this
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people
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think
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news
has no evident connection with
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people
life
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reading
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news
from a newspaper or watching it on television is a waste of time. Watching or reading
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news
has its
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pros and cons in my opinion.

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todays
world we need to stay updated all the time.
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plays an
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important
role in keeping us posted about the
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day to day
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events
. Watching or reading
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news
can provide around the globe
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information
and it is the biggest exposure one can
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get
.
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, This can
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be possible when
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information
is coming from a trusted source.

As the number of
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sources
of
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information
grows,
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sources
of fake
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also
grows and no
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information
is way better than fake
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. Due to the rise of fake
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people
are
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now
not interested in knowing the
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news
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because
it has nothing to do with
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people
's life.

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,
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news
is
extremely
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important
part of our
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lives and
we need to follow the
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news
,
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but
the
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news
needs to
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come
from a reliable
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source
a
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source
which is authentic in nature. For that
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government
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news
channels
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has to
take responsibility to
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show
authentic and genuine
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news
,
otherwise
serious action will
be taken
against them.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so it is a waste of time to read the news in newspapers and watch television news programs. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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