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Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so it is a waste of time to read the news in newspapers and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

It is argued that news is not relevant source for people and as such there is no point in wasting time reading newspapers or watching news channels. In my opinion, I totally disagree with this view. But, I think news impacts both directly and indirectly and stay informed of the happenings around humans. To begin with, News is important source for public. Some people assume that the only purpose of reading the newspaper is to increase general knowledge. So, we generally follow the news stories to boost general knowledge. However, there are many benefits to being aware of news. News shapes perception of the world. When we read about the negative news than we arrive at the conclusion that the world is a dangerous place. They encourages people to take enough precautions. For example, when people read cyber crime news in newspaper, they become more conscious about share their personal and financial information online. On the other hand, News also shapes public opinion. I believe reading newspapers or watching news channels is a waste of time. We read thousands of articles everyday, but remember few of them are help people make better decisions for their life, business or carrier. For example, weather forecasts and political news do not affect most of individuals. In addition, news produces news that capures viewers’s attention. So, the human brain reacts the different types of information such as shocking, real life incidents and many more. In conclusion, News has a real connection to shape person’s opinions and change percepectives of people’s lives.
It
is argued
that
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news
is not relevant source for
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people
and as such there is no point in wasting time reading
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newspapers
or watching
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news
channels. In my opinion, I
totally
disagree with this view.
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, I
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think
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news
impacts both
directly
and
indirectly
and stay informed of the happenings around humans.

To
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begin
with,
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News
is
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important
source for public.
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Some
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people
assume that the
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only
purpose of reading the
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newspaper
is to increase general knowledge.
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So
, we
generally
follow the
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news
stories to boost general knowledge.
However
, there are
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many
benefits to being aware of
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news
.
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News
shapes perception of the world.
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When
we read about the
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negative
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news
than we arrive at the conclusion that the world is a
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dangerous
place. They
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encourages
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people
to take
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enough
precautions.
For example
, when
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people
read cyber crime
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news
in
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newspaper
, they become more conscious about share their personal and financial information online.

On the other hand
,
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News
also
shapes public opinion. I believe reading
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newspapers
or watching
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news
channels is a waste of time. We read thousands of articles
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everyday
,
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but
remember few of them are
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help
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people
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make
better decisions for their life, business or carrier.
For example
, weather forecasts and political
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news
do not affect
After 'most of', you should use 'the' ("most of the individuals") or simply say "most individuals".
most of individuals
.
In addition
,
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news
produces
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news
that
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capures
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viewers’s
attention.
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So
, the human brain reacts the
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different
types of information such as shocking, real life incidents and
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many
more.

In conclusion
,
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News
has a real connection to shape person’s opinions and
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change
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percepectives
of
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people’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.
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IELTS essay Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so it is a waste of time to read the news in newspapers and watch television news programs.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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