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Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so it is a waste of time to read the news in newspapers and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so it is a waste of time to read the news in newspapers and watch television news programs. v. 3
Many people believed that having the news, such as in tv program or newspaper, in their life is have no different as a person who does not know. It is okay to not knowing the unimportant news, but what about the biggest news like the approaching of a tornado nearby your area or Corona virus. In this essay I will argue why some people not seeing it crucial and some seeing it as an essential one. Nowadays, even we can easily earn the news from around the world, but still, everyone is not completely thinking they should know about it. It probably caused by they are not seeing the benefits of having known what is going on. Indeed, some news is having nothing to know, for instance a kitten was rescued by a firefighter this morning. So it is true that some news is nonsense. Although there are some who don't interested, we still have the groups of people who do. No matter, they know it from TV or newspaper, or what topic is it. These people can know and prevent the bad thing, which might possibly happen. For example, while the citizen that have watched news know what to deal with Covid-19, the citizen who have not watched is in danger of living the same lifestyle, no social distant. It is obvious that people who have know is having much more advantage than who have not. In conclusion, From the information, who have know and not have known the news, with some example above have argued, It has proven that the good side of knowing news outweighs the disadvantage. Lastly, I strongly recommend everyone, children to elder, to spend some time to watching the news every day as much as possible for your own benefits.
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news
, such as in
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tv
program or newspaper, in their life is
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have
no
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different
as a person
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who
does not
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know
. It is okay to not knowing the unimportant
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news
,
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but
what about the biggest
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news
like the approaching of a tornado nearby your area or
The term "Coronavirus" (= disease) is spelled as one word.
Corona virus
. In this essay I will argue why
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some
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people
not seeing it crucial and
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some
seeing it as an essential one.

Nowadays, even we can
easily
earn the
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news
from around the world,
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but
still
, everyone is not completely thinking they should
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know
about it. It
probably
caused by they are not seeing the benefits of
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having
known what is going on.
Indeed
,
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some
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news
is
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having
nothing to
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know
,
for instance
a kitten
was rescued
by a firefighter this morning.
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So
it is true that
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some
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news
is nonsense.

Although there are
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some
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who
don't interested, we
still
have the groups of
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people
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who
do. No matter, they
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know
it from TV or newspaper, or what topic is it. These
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people
can
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know
and
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prevent
the
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bad
thing, which might
possibly
happen.
For example
, while the citizen that have
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watched
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news
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know
what to deal with Covid-19, the citizen
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who
have not
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watched
is in
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danger
of living the same lifestyle, no social distant. It is obvious that
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people
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who
have
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is
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having
much more advantage than
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who
have not.

In conclusion
, From the information,
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who
have
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know
and not have known the
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news
, with
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some
example above have argued, It has proven that the
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good
side of knowing
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news
outweighs the disadvantage.
Lastly
, I
strongly
recommend everyone, children to elder, to spend
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some
time to watching the
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news
every day as much as possible for your
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own
benefits.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so it is a waste of time to read the news in newspapers and watch television news programs. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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