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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.6

Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. v. 6
People have different views on the number of company that employees should work for. While some people think that it is a great idea to work in the same organisation throughout their working life, I believe that it would be better to change the working environment sometimes. There are three key reasons why people think they should work in only one company in their entire worklife. The first reason is that people love to stay in their comfort zone. This is because things and colleagues around them are familiar to them and they would feel safe to work there. The second reason is that they think it it a better way to get more benefits in that company. For example, employees are entitled to one more day of annual leave if they work one more year in that company so this kind of benefit may be appealing to some people. The third reason is that staying in the same company is good for focusing on their work because they can make good use of their time for a better working performance instead of wasting time on searching for new companies. Although the benefits of working in one company are clear, I still believe that keep changing organisation is a much better choice. The most compelling reason is that people can get to know themselves better if they work in a variety of organisations. It is because the job duties in every company varies, employees can try something new whenever they change their job and they may be able to find what they really like or what suits them most. Moreover, working in different organisations provides people a precious chance to improve themselves and also to learn how to deal with new challenges. Since the company culture and requirements of their new supervisors are new to them, they would need to come up with new ways to get used to or deal with the new environment. In conclusion, while it may seem reasonable to stay in the same company throughout the whole worklife, I believe that it is better to change jobs when it is necessary.
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organisation
throughout their
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life, I believe that it would be
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to
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change
the
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environment
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sometimes
.

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reasons
why
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because
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them and
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there. The second
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get
more benefits in that
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company
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to one more day of annual
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if they
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company
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this kind of benefit may be appealing to
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people
. The third
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reason
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for focusing on their
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work
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because
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make
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of their time for a
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performance
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company
varies, employees can try something
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whenever they
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job and
they may be able to find what they
really
like or what suits them most.
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a precious chance to
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improve
themselves and
also
to learn how to deal with
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new
challenges. Since the
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company
culture and requirements of their
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new
supervisors are
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new
to them, they would need to
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come
up with
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new
ways to
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environment.

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, while it may seem reasonable to stay in the same
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company
throughout the whole
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worklife
, I believe that it is
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to
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change
jobs when it is necessary.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
355 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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