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Over time, as children grow older, the relationship they have with their parents changes. In your opinion, what role should parents have in their adult children’s lives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Over time, as children grow older, the relationship they have with their parents changes. In your opinion, what role should parents have in their adult children’s lives? v. 1
As young people move from adolescence to adulthood, the nature of their relationship with their parents typically changes from dependence to a more equal, mutually supportive relationship between adults. In my opinion, even after children have grown into adults, parents still have an important role in their life. For example, they can continue to give emotional support to their grown up children. Adulthood is the stage of, life when a person has to bear a lot of responsibilities and face different kinds of challenges. At such times, lack of experience to manage responsibilities and pressure of challenges may put a person in stressful situations. It is in these situations that they badly need the guidance and the emotional support of their parents. In fact, parental support can turn hard times into great opportunities to learn and improve. Various studies have shown that emotional support is the most desired form of help that every adult requires and none other than parents can offer it in abundance. In addition to emotional support, parents can pass down values to their children. It is often believed that the right set of values and appropriate approach towards various aspects of life leads to a peaceful, happy and satisfied life which is the ultimate goal for most people. Adulthood is also the period of life when one has to unlearn some values or philosophy and learn fresh ones instead. And at this stage of confusion, our parents can teach us the right set of values and attitudes to lead a happy life. In conclusion, as children grow up, parents’ role changes from that of caregiver to that of a guide or emotional support system.
As young
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people
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from adolescence to adulthood, the nature of their relationship with their
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parents
typically
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changes
from dependence to a more equal,
mutually
supportive relationship between adults. In my opinion, even after children have grown into adults,
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parents
still
have an
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important
role in their
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life
.
For example
, they can continue to give
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emotional
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support
to their grown up children.

Adulthood is the stage of,
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life
when a person
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has to
bear
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a lot of
responsibilities and face
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different
kinds of challenges. At such times, lack of experience to manage responsibilities and pressure of challenges may put a person in stressful situations. It is in these situations that they
badly
need the guidance and the
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emotional
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support
of their
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parents
. In fact, parental
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support
can turn
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hard
times into great opportunities to learn and
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improve
.

Various studies have shown that
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emotional
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support
is the most desired form of
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help
that every adult requires and none other than
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parents
can offer it in abundance.
In addition
to
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emotional
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support
,
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parents
can pass down values to their children. It is
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often
believed that the right set of values and appropriate approach towards various aspects of
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life
leads to a peaceful, happy and satisfied
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life
which is the ultimate goal for most
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people
. Adulthood is
also
the period of
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life
when one
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has to
unlearn
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some
values or philosophy and learn fresh ones
instead
. And at this stage of confusion, our
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parents
can teach us the right set of values and attitudes to lead a happy life.

In conclusion
, as children grow up,
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parents’
role
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changes
from that of caregiver to that of a guide or
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emotional
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support
system.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Over time, as children grow older, the relationship they have with their parents changes. In your opinion, what role should parents have in their adult children’s lives? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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