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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.5

Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. v. 5
Switching of jobs is a common trend that we can see in the current generation. While some people say it is good to be with the same company for their entire career as it gives stable living environment, others think it is better to keep switching the organisation for better payment and more exposure to the multiple domains. This essay will discuss how we can achieve better salary and knowledge exposure through company switching. Apparently, working different companies is beneficial in terms of money and knowledge. This is because, those who are switching their job frequently might have the change to get high salary packages from multi-national companies because many companies are looking for experienced candidates. Experienced people can negotiate salary and they would be able to better remuneration. Moreover, these people can also have the exposure to multiple domains because of their experience in different organisations. For example, 90 percentage of IT employees who keeps switching their companies are earning better payments than the employees who sticks in one company. Additionally, Most companies prefer to hire these types of employees because they have the knowledge in multiple areas. Thus, changing companies is good in terms of domain enlightenment and payment. However, a group of people still thinks that it is better to stay in an organisation for their lifetime so that they can have a stable existence. To go into detail, staying in single organisation is less stressful than attending interviews frequently and changing the jobs. Although switching jobs are beneficial for the employee, it stops the people from having a stable living as they need to change their job location frequently. There is no guarantee that we could get a job in the same city. For instance, people who keep changing their companies are less likely to build a house settled. Even though they have capital, they cannot stick into a single city. Due to this their life's equilibrium will get distracted. In conclusion, the job is an important aspect in every individual's life. People who like to earn more in terms of money and proficiency are more likely to switch their jobs. On the other hand, people who like to have a non-stressful non-ambitious life tend to stay within their organisation for their survival time. This essay agreed that changing jobs across different organisations is better for having a joyful living hood because money is the key aspect behind happiness.
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say it is
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good
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company
for their entire career as it gives stable living environment, others
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think
it is
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better
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switching
the
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organisation
for
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better
payment and more exposure to the multiple domains. This essay will discuss how we can achieve
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better
salary and knowledge exposure through
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company
switching.

Apparently
, working
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different
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companies
is beneficial in terms of money and knowledge. This is
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who
are
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switching
their
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frequently
might have the
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high salary packages from multi-national
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companies
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because
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many
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companies
are looking for experienced candidates. Experienced
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people
can negotiate
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salary and
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better
remuneration.
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can
also
have the exposure to multiple domains
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because
of their experience in
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different
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organisations
.
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, 90 percentage of IT
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employees
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who
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keeps
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switching
their
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companies
are earning
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better
payments than the
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employees
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who
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sticks
in one
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company
.
Additionally
, Most
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companies
prefer to hire these types of
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employees
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because
they have the knowledge in multiple areas.
Thus
,
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changing
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companies
is
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good
in terms of domain enlightenment and payment.

However
, a group of
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people
still
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better
to stay in an
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organisation
for their lifetime
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that they can have a stable existence. To go into detail, staying in single
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organisation
is less stressful than attending interviews
frequently
and
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changing
the
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jobs
. Although
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switching
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jobs
are beneficial for the
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employee
, it
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stops
the
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people
from having a stable living as they need to
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change
their
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job
location
frequently
. There is no guarantee that we could
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get
a
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job
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in the same
city.
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,
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people
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who
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keep
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changing
their
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are less likely to build a
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house
settled.
Even though
they have capital, they cannot stick into a single city. Due to this their life's equilibrium will
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get
distracted.

In conclusion
, the
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job
is an
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important
aspect in every individual's life.
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People
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who
like to earn more in terms of money and proficiency are more likely to switch their
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jobs
.
On the other hand
,
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people
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who
like to have a non-stressful non-ambitious life tend to stay within their
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organisation
for their survival time. This essay
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that
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changing
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jobs
across
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different
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organisations
is
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better
for having a joyful living hood
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because
money is the key aspect behind happiness.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
403 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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