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Some people to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. v. 1
Large supermarkets have recently introduced online grocery shopping. While many shoppers do their food shopping online, many still tend to prefer shopping the traditional way by visiting the supermarket. This essay will discuss why online food shopping has its benefits, but why traditional food shopping is ultimately superior. Online food shopping is certainly an efficient way to complete what many people consider to be a laborious chore. A person can simply click through a website and have food delivered- within a very short period of time- to one's door. As an example, a major supermarket in Australia promises a three hour turnaround time on grocery delivery. Being able to shop online saves busy people the unnecessary the hassle of having to visit a supermarket. But not everyone needs to save time and visiting a supermarket can in fact be an extremely positive experience. Walking through the aisles allows one to choose from a vast array of different products and to decide exactly what goes into the shopping basket. For example, think about the variety of different vegetables available at the supermarket. It is enjoyable selecting best avocado from the pile. It goes without saying that supermarket shopping if you have the time, can be a pleasurable experience. With the introduction of online food shopping, traditional routine is being challenged. This essay discussed why online shopping can be an extremely efficient process, but why shopping at a supermarket in a person can be such a pleasurable experience. In my opinion, visiting the supermarket offers a superior experience to online shopping.
Large supermarkets have recently introduced
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food
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,
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many
still
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the traditional way by visiting the supermarket. This essay will discuss why
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online
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food
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has its benefits,
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why traditional
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food
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is
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many
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people
consider to be a laborious chore. A person can
simply
click through a website and have
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food
delivered- within a
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short period of
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time-
to one's door. As an example, a major supermarket in Australia promises a
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three hour
turnaround
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on grocery delivery. Being able to shop
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saves busy
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people
the unnecessary the hassle of having to visit a supermarket.

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not everyone needs to save
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time
and visiting a supermarket can in fact be an
extremely
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positive
experience. Walking through the aisles
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allows
one to choose from a vast array of
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different
products and to decide exactly what goes into the
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basket.
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think
about the variety of
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vegetables available at the supermarket. It is enjoyable
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selecting best
avocado from the pile. It goes without saying that supermarket
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shopping
if you have the
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time
, can be a pleasurable experience.

With the introduction of
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online
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food
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, traditional routine is
being challenged
. This essay discussed why
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online
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shopping
can be an
extremely
efficient process,
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but
why
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shopping
at a supermarket in a person can be such a pleasurable experience. In my opinion, visiting the supermarket offers a superior experience to
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online
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2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay Some people to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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