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Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. Discuss on both views and give your opinion. v.5

Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. Discuss on both views and give your opinion. v. 5
It is often observed that some inhabitants choose to go to the grocery store to purchase their cookery items, while others buy it on the internet. Whilst a discussion of both these views is worthwhile, I am a supporter of the former view. On the one hand, opting to go to a departmental store to shop their food helps them to select the fresh fruits and vegetables. In other words, going to the supermarkets lead to buy the food items that have arrived on that day of shopping. Moreover, we can check the expiry date and buy the products to store it for a longer period and it will help us to do some physical activity by going to the supermarket and carrying the foodstuff. For example, in India, people living in countryside prefer to go to the shop in person to buy a healthy food item. In my opinion, I believe going to the convenience store will help them to pick a good quality product and by consuming it helps to live a healthy life. On the other hand, shopping through wired network will make their time to utilise for other task. That is to say that when people are working for the whole week, they will not get time to do their shopping in the store, instead they prefer to order in online. By this way they can spend their time with their family or complete their office work without any problems. For instance, the populace residing in urban areas opts for online shopping because of their hectic work schedule which make them tired to go to the shop and buy the eatables. However, I do not support this notion because it will lead to sedentary lifestyle and they will not get the correct and best items. In conclusion, although buying the food items through online is a time saving process and the public can use those times to do different activities, I think, visiting the store to buy the cooking items will help them to purchase a newly available products by checking the end date of the item.
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observed that
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some
inhabitants choose to go to the grocery
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store
to
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purchase
their cookery
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items
, while others
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buy
it on the internet. Whilst a discussion of both these views is worthwhile, I am a supporter of the former view.

On the one hand, opting to go to a departmental
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store
to shop their
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food
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helps
them to select the fresh fruits and vegetables. In
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other
words, going to the supermarkets lead to
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buy
the
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food
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items
that have arrived on that day of
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shopping
.
Moreover
, we can
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check
the expiry date and
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buy
the products to
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store
it for a longer period and it will
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help
us to do
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some
physical activity by going to the supermarket and carrying the foodstuff.
For example
, in India,
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people
living in countryside prefer to go to the shop in person to
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buy
a healthy
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food
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item
. In my opinion, I believe going to the convenience
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store
will
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help
them to pick a
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good
quality product and by consuming it
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helps
to
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live
a healthy life.

On the
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other
hand,
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shopping
through wired network will
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make
their
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time
to
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for
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other
task.
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to say that when
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people
are working for the whole week, they will not
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get
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time
to do their
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shopping
in the
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store
,
instead
they prefer to order in online. By this way they can spend their
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time
with their family or complete their office work without any problems.
For instance
, the populace residing in urban areas opts for online
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shopping
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because
of their hectic work schedule which
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make
them tired to go to the shop and
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buy
the eatables.
However
, I do not support this notion
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because
it will lead to sedentary
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lifestyle and
they will not
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get
the correct and best items.

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, although buying the
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food
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items
through online is a
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time
saving process and the public can
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use
those
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times
to do
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different
activities, I
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think
, visiting the
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store
to
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buy
the cooking
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items
will
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help
them to
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purchase
a
newly
available products by checking the
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end
date of the
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item
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. Discuss on both views and give your opinion. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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